Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap iyi niyetli fakat dilbilgisi ve akıcılık açısından geliştirilmelidir. Kısa ve net bir konu cümlesi kurun, gereksiz dolgu kelimelerinden (ör. "uh", "on the other hand") kaçının. İkinci cümlede zamanı ve duyguyu daha doğru ifade etmek için doğru zamanları ve tam cümle yapısını kullanın. Özne-fiil uyumuna dikkat edin (ör. "I take pictures"), ve belirsiz ifadeleri somut örneklerle destekleyin. Ayrıca cevap 3–4 cümle içinde kalsın ve bağlaçları (for example, because, so) mantıklı şekilde kullanın.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they make great wallpapers and remind me of peaceful moments. For example, when I watch the sea, I often take pictures of the waves to capture the calm feeling. I usually use these photos as my phone background to relive that tranquility.

提案: Cevabınız net ancak tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları mevcut. "Piece of a nature" yanlış bir ifade; doğru ifade "a piece of nature" veya "part of nature" olmalı. Tekrar eden kelimelerden kaçının: aynı fikri üç kez tekrarlamışsınız. Bağlaçlarla gerekçenizi kısaca genişletin ve somut bir örnek verin. Cümleleri daha düzgün hale getirmek için özne-fiil uyumunu sağlayın ve 2–3 cümlede kalmaya çalışın.

例: I prefer rural areas because they feel like a piece of nature and are very peaceful. For instance, walking in the countryside helps me relax and clear my mind. That calm atmosphere is why I usually choose rural views over urban ones.

提案: Cevabınız samimi ancak tekrarlar, konuşma dili kısmi hatalar ve bağlaçların yanlış kullanımı var. "and and" gibi tekrarlar ve "is a. Gorgeous" gibi noktalama hatalarını düzeltin. Ayrıca "wanna" gibi konuşma ağızlı ifadeler yerine "want to" kullanın. Karşılaştırma yaparken açık bir tercih belirtin ve merakınızı somut bir nedenle destekleyin (ör. örnek veya plan). Cümleleri 2–3 kısa cümleyle sınırlayın.

例: I prefer the views in my own country because I find many places here truly gorgeous and familiar. However, I'm curious about landscapes abroad and would like to visit other countries to see different scenery and cultures.

× So when I see a good waves, I taking pictures of it.

✓ So when I see good waves, I take pictures of them.

The original has multiple issues: 'a good waves' mixes singular article with plural noun (use no article and plural 'good waves'), and 'I taking' omits the auxiliary 'am' for present continuous or should use simple present 'I take'. Here simple present 'I take pictures of them' fits habitual action. Also pronoun 'it' should agree with plural 'waves', so use 'them'. Suggestion: use 'I take pictures of them' for habitual actions or 'I'm taking pictures of them' for actions happening now.

× I prefer rural areas because rural areas are piece of a nature and rural areas are peaceful and.

✓ I prefer rural areas because rural areas are a part of nature and rural areas are peaceful.

The phrase 'piece of a nature' is incorrect. Use 'a part of nature' or 'part of nature' without 'a' before 'nature'. Also remove the trailing 'and.' which is incomplete. Suggestion: say 'rural areas are a part of nature and are peaceful' or shorten to 'rural areas are peaceful and a part of nature.'

× It makes me calm down and relax, so I really like rural areas.

✓ They make me calm down and relax, so I really like rural areas.

Subject 'rural areas' is plural, so verb must be plural 'make' not 'makes'. Change 'It' to 'They' to match plurality. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number.

× Well, I love my own country's views and and everywhere in my country is a. Gorgeous on the other hand, I don't know that much about other countries, but I am curious about them and I wanna visit other countries.

✓ Well, I love my own country's views; everywhere in my country is gorgeous. On the other hand, I don't know that much about other countries, but I am curious about them and I want to visit other countries.

Several issues: duplicated 'and and' and stray 'a.' before 'Gorgeous'—remove the extra 'a' and capitalize sentence start. 'wanna' is informal spoken contraction; use 'want to' in writing. Also punctuation improved: use semicolon or period between clauses. Suggestion: write 'everywhere in my country is gorgeous' and replace 'wanna' with 'want to'.

× Yes, I do and sometimes I use them for a wallpaper. On the other hand, when I go and look at them, I feel like, uh, at that moment and it is very peaceful for me.

✓ Yes, I do, and sometimes I use them as wallpapers. On the other hand, when I go and look at them, I feel peaceful at that moment.

Use 'as wallpapers' rather than 'for a wallpaper' since 'them' refers to pictures (plural). The phrase 'I feel like, uh, at that moment and it is very peaceful for me' is awkward and redundant; simplify to 'I feel peaceful at that moment.' Remove filler 'uh' in writing. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and match plurality and preposition use.