Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural, use correct tense and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and correct verb forms (e.g., present simple for habits).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I usually take photos whenever I go on trips, especially landscapes and cityscapes, because they help me remember places and share experiences with friends. For example, last month I photographed a coastal sunset and later edited it to emphasize the colors.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then add a concise reason and a specific example. Avoid vague statements and unnecessary phrases. Use linking words (because, for example) to make your response coherent and natural.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the energy and architecture of cities. For example, I like photographing modern buildings and busy streets since they show interesting contrasts of light and movement.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar (use present simple and concise phrasing). Provide a specific reason and an example of what appeals to you abroad. Use linking words like because and for example to structure your answer.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new scenery and cultural differences. For example, when I visited Japan I was fascinated by the contrast between traditional temples and modern skyscrapers, which made great photos.

× I usually click the pictures when I went out for any trips.

✓ I usually take pictures when I go out on trips.

The sentence mixes present habit ('usually') with past tense 'went'. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'go' not 'went'. Also 'click the pictures' is informal; 'take pictures' is natural, and 'on trips' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× We all know that it is a modern era and urban areas are rising a lot, so that's why I also like to prefer the views of urban areas that attract some people toward them.

✓ We all know this is a modern era and urban areas are growing rapidly, so I prefer the views of urban areas that attract people.

Pronoun and wording issues: 'it is a modern era' is better as 'this is a modern era'. 'Rising a lot' is unnatural; use 'growing rapidly'. 'I also like to prefer' is redundant; use 'I prefer'. 'Attract some people toward them' is wordy, use 'attract people'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and concise structure.

× Well, I would like to prefer the views of other countries because we almost familiar to view of our own country and if we will visit the other countries we can. We can experience the views of their countries.

✓ Well, I prefer the views of other countries because we are already familiar with the views of our own country, and when we visit other countries we can experience their views.

Tense and verb form errors: 'would like to prefer' is awkward — use 'prefer'. 'We almost familiar to view' is incorrect: use present tense 'we are already familiar with the views'. Do not use 'if we will visit'; use 'when we visit' for general situations. Combine sentences for clarity and correct preposition use ('familiar with', 'views of' -> 'their views').