Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体自然且内容相关，但存在重复、语法和表达不够简洁的问题。注意避免重复（如“remind and preserve my memories”与后文重复），改进句子连贯性和词语搭配（如“look these photos later”应为“look at these photos later”）。建议使用1个主题句加1-2句具体细节，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because they help me preserve travel memories. When I look at these photos later, they remind me of the places I visited and the activities I did, so I can easily share those experiences with my friends.

提案: 回答表达含混，语法错误较多，句子结构不完整。需要先给出直接的立场（例如“both”并简要说明原因），然后用清晰、连贯的句子分别描述城市和乡村的具体感受。注意动词搭配、冠词使用和句子完整性。

例: I prefer both, depending on my mood. In urban areas I like the skyline and modern architecture because the lively atmosphere energises me. In the countryside I appreciate the fresh air and wide open landscapes because they help me relax.

提案: 回答含义不清且有多处词汇和拼写错误（如“sincerely”, “aboard”, “celifies”），句子断裂导致表达不连贯。建议先给出明确观点，然后用一两个具体对比点（熟悉感 vs 新奇感），并避免拼写错误，使用恰当短语（例如“coastal scenery”）。

例: I enjoy both. Views in my own country feel familiar and peaceful, which helps me unwind. Views abroad are more exciting because I can explore different landscapes and cultures, for example, admiring coastal scenery in another country.

× I like taking pictures of different views because they capture the best memories of my travels and remind and preserve my memories.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because they capture the best memories of my travels and preserve my memories.

句中原本用到的“remind and preserve my memories”中，“remind”后没有明确宾语且与前半句重复含义，造成冗余与结构问题。根据题意应使用动名词或不定式中的一个动作，这里保留“preserve”即可。建议将并列动词调整为单一动词或明确宾语以保持句子简洁。

× When I look these photos later, they remind me where I went and what I did so I can share the experience with my friends.

✓ When I look at these photos later, they remind me where I went and what I did, so I can share the experience with my friends.

短语“look these photos”缺少介词“at”，构成结构错误；此外在连接两个分句时在“did”和“so”之间加逗号使句子更清晰。建议记住固定搭配“look at”来表示“看（某物）”。

× I like both urban and the rural view because they often different experience.

✓ I like both urban and rural views because they often offer different experiences.

原句中“the rural view”与前面的“urban”搭配不一致，且“experience”应为可数复数“experiences”。同时缺少动词“offer”。应保持名词形式一致并使用复数以匹配“different”。建议注意可数名词单复数和并列结构的一致性。

× In the city I enjoy the skyline and the modern buildings they feel they make me feel excited.

✓ In the city I enjoy the skyline and the modern buildings; they make me feel excited.

原句中出现了多余的主语和谓语重复（“they feel they make me feel”），造成主谓不一致与冗余。正确应为独立句“they make me feel excited”。建议避免重复主语和多余的动词短语。

× When I in the countryside I enjoy the fresh air and the open wild it makes me feel.

✓ When I am in the countryside, I enjoy the fresh air and the open spaces; they make me feel relaxed.

原句缺少系动词“am”且“open wild”用法不自然，句尾“it makes me feel”不完整缺少具体感受词。应补上系动词并改为常用短语“open spaces”，并补充描述如“relaxed”。建议注意完整句子需要主语和谓语以及明确的宾语或补语。

× I enjoy both views at home and in other countries. The sincerely in my own country feels familiar and peaceful, which helps me relax after a busy week.

✓ I enjoy both views at home and in other countries. The scenery in my own country feels familiar and peaceful, which helps me relax after a busy week.

原句中“Sincerely”拼写错误且词性错误，应为名词“scenery”表示“景色”。这是词汇选择问题导致时态与含义不符。建议注意常用词汇拼写并使用正确的词类来表达‘景色’。

× While views aboard are exciting and novel because I can discover different landscapes and the cultures, for example, visiting. Coastal celifies in other country.

✓ Views abroad are exciting and novel because I can discover different landscapes and cultures; for example, visiting coastal cities in other countries.

原句存在多处错误：1) “aboard”应为“abroad”；2) “the cultures”中冠词多余且复数名词无需定冠词；3) “for example, visiting. Coastal celifies in other country.”是断裂的从句，意图应为“例如参观其他国家的海滨城市”；“celifies”拼写错误，应为“cities”，且“country”应为复数“countries”。需要连贯重写句子并修正拼写及冠词使用。建议注意拼写、冠词和完整句子结构。