Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but very brief and lacks detail. To improve, start with a direct topic sentence and then add one or two specific supporting details (what kinds of views you like, why you enjoy photographing them, or how often you do it). Use a linking word to connect ideas and keep it natural and concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I love capturing city skylines at sunset because the light makes the buildings look dramatic, and I often go out at weekends to practice composition and lighting.

提案: The answer has a typo/word choice error (‘bills’ instead of ‘buildings’) and is one-dimensional. Improve by correcting vocabulary, giving a reason, and adding a contrasting comment with a linking word. Keep responses concise and natural.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I like the variety of architecture and the way lights create atmosphere at night. However, sometimes I also enjoy rural views for their peacefulness and natural colours.

提案: Your reply is understandable but vague and repetitive. Improve by stating a clearer preference or explaining situations when you prefer each, using linking words to organise the answer and adding specific examples to make it more informative.

例: It depends: at home I prefer familiar landscapes because I know the best viewpoints, but when I travel abroad I enjoy new cultural scenes and architecture. For instance, I love photographing traditional markets at home and historic streets when I visit other countries.

× I prefer bills in urban areas because they are so beautiful.

✓ I prefer buildings in urban areas because they are so beautiful.

The student used the word 'bills' which is a noun meaning invoices, not appropriate for describing city views. The correct word is 'buildings'. This is a vocabulary/word choice error classified here as incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs because the wrong lexical item changes the meaning. Suggestion: use 'building' for structures; check spelling and meaning before using a word.

× I do prefer sometimes my own country and sometimes other countries.

✓ Sometimes I prefer my own country and sometimes I prefer other countries.

The original sentence has awkward word order. Placing the adverb 'sometimes' between the auxiliary 'do' and the main verb 'prefer' is grammatical but sounds unnatural in this context. Reordering to 'Sometimes I prefer... and sometimes I prefer...' makes the contrast clear and natural. Suggestion: Put adverbs like 'sometimes' at the beginning of the clause or before the verb for clearer emphasis; repeat the verb in both clauses for parallel structure.