Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural, relevant and gives a clear topic sentence plus supporting detail. To improve further, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add one specific detail (when/where or camera setting) to make it more vivid. Use a linking word to connect the general preference and the specific example.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, since I bought a new phone last month, I often shoot landscapes like mountains and sunsets because the light shifts dramatically at dusk, and I recently captured a sharp panorama of the hills from my balcony using the phone’s panorama mode.

提案: The main idea is clear, but there are grammatical issues and some repetition. To improve: use a concise topic sentence, avoid informal words like "overrated" without support, correct grammar (e.g., "it got" → "they have"), and add a linking phrase and one specific example of a rural scene or emotion it evokes.

例: I prefer rural views because they feel calmer and more natural. For instance, I enjoy photographing mountain ridges and rivers in quiet villages, where soft morning mist and open fields create peaceful compositions.

提案: Good content and clear preference, but reduce repetition and fix word choice (e.g., "prestigious" and "Himalayans" are awkward). Be specific about what you like in those places and link reasons to examples. Use one concise supporting detail such as a memory or photographic goal.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal offers dramatic mountain scenery and unique cultural sites. For example, I’d love to photograph the Annapurna range and the high-altitude lakes around Mustang and Manang to capture both the towering peaks and traditional hillside monasteries.

× Absolutely. Since I got my new phone, I enjoy photographing different scenes and places.

✓ Absolutely. Since I got my new phone, I have enjoyed photographing different scenes and places.

Use present perfect ('have enjoyed') with 'since' to link a past event (getting the phone) to ongoing experience. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions that started in the past and continue to the present.

× I especially like taking landscape shots of mountains and sunsets because the light changes constantly and I recently captured a great view of the hills from my home balcony.

✓ I especially like taking landscape shots of mountains and sunsets because the light changes constantly, and I recently captured a great view of the hills from my home balcony.

This sentence is largely correct but needs a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. 'Recently captured' is correct in past tense since it refers to a specific past event. Suggestion: add a comma for clarity when joining independent clauses.

× So I rather prefer rural areas since it got the natural touch in every part, every view of it.

✓ So I prefer rural areas because they have a natural charm in every part and in every view.

Multiple issues: 'rather prefer' is redundant; use 'prefer'. 'Since' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer. 'It got' is incorrect informal structure and wrong tense; use 'they have' to match plural 'rural areas'. 'Natural touch' is awkward; 'natural charm' is more natural. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and avoid redundant words.

× And then I would love to take photos of mountains, hills and the rivers nearby.

✓ And I would love to take photos of the mountains, hills and nearby rivers.

Use definite article 'the' before plural geographic features when referring to specific ones and place adjective 'nearby' before 'rivers' for natural word order. 'And then' is unnecessary; removing 'then' improves fluency. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific items and correct adjective order.

× I do. I do prefer the view of my own country because Nepal is a prestigious country known for its mountains, hills, lakes and Beni monasteries.

✓ Yes, I prefer the views in my own country because Nepal is a beautiful country known for its mountains, hills, lakes and monasteries in places like Beni.

'Repetition "I do. I do prefer" is unnatural; use 'Yes, I prefer'. 'Prestigious' is not the best collocation for landscape features; 'beautiful' fits better. 'Beni monasteries' is unclear; rephrase to 'monasteries in places like Beni'. Suggestion: avoid repetitive affirmations and choose collocations that match meaning.

× So I would love to go to Mustang and Manang and take the views of Himalayans and the lakes.

✓ So I would love to go to Mustang and Manang and photograph the Himalayas and the lakes.

'Himalayans' is incorrect plural form and not the usual noun; use 'the Himalayas'. 'Take the views of' is awkward; use 'photograph' or 'take pictures of'. Suggestion: use correct geographical noun forms and natural collocations for photography.