Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy like “new different views.”

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I visit a new place I often photograph the skyline or a scenic spot to remember the atmosphere.

提案: Provide a clearer, more specific reason and expand slightly with a linking word to make the answer coherent. Avoid repeating the same phrase; explain what you like about urban views.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the contrast of modern architecture and busy streets. For instance, I like photographing cityscapes at sunset to capture the lights and reflections.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity, and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words (e.g., because, so) and avoid awkward phrasing like “this these.”

例: I prefer views in my own country because I can take my time exploring familiar places and discover local details. For example, I often spend a weekend visiting nearby coastal towns to photograph their unique landscapes.

× Yes, I like to take pictures when I see a new different views.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures when I see a new different view.

The noun 'views' is plural but modified by the singular determiner phrase 'a new different', causing a singular-plural mismatch. Use 'view' (singular) to match 'a', or remove 'a' and say 'new different views'. Also, 'new' and 'different' are redundant together; choose one for clearer English.

× I prefer views in urban areas because I like urban areas.

✓ I prefer urban views because I like urban areas.

The original repeats 'urban areas' and sounds redundant. Reordering to 'urban views' is more natural and avoids repetition. This fixes sentence structure by making the object concise and matching the context of 'prefer'.

× I prefer views in my own country because I will take my time to see this these new views.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I will take my time to see these new views.

There is a conflict between 'this' (singular) and 'these' (plural). Use 'these' to match the plural noun 'views'. Also, 'will take my time' is acceptable for future intent. If you mean general habit, use present tense: 'I take my time to see these new views.'