Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "remember" and "recall" together) and limit to 3–4 short sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, I often take photos of sunsets or city skylines when I travel so I can look back and remember the atmosphere. I also share the best shots with friends to remind them of trips we had together.

提案: Give a direct preference (or say you have no strong preference) then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Be careful with word choice (e.g., "sound" is unclear for a view) and avoid filler phrases. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer urban views because modern cities often have striking architecture and unique landmarks. For example, I like photographing skyscrapers and interesting façades that show a city's character. However, I also appreciate rural scenes for their calmness, so sometimes I choose countryside shots when I want peaceful images.

提案: Answer clearly: state whether you prefer one or both, then explain with specific reasons and use linking words to make your points coherent. Correct grammar (e.g., "different memories", "I don't think one is better") and avoid vague phrases like "different feelings"—describe the feelings specifically.

例: I don't think one is better; I enjoy photographing both. When I photograph my hometown, I capture familiar places that remind me of my childhood. In foreign countries, I take photos to record new experiences and unique cultural scenes, which feel exciting and unfamiliar.

× I like to take a picture of different views because I just want to remember something and recall something.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I just want to remember and recall things.

Use of verb + -ing (present participle) after 'like' is more natural and common: 'like taking' instead of 'like to take' (both possible but -ing fits general preference). Also 'a picture' and 'something' are too specific/unnatural here: plural 'pictures' matches 'different views', and 'things' is better than repeating 'something'. This improves noun number agreement and fluency.

× So I will take a beautiful moment, some beautiful views.

✓ So I will capture beautiful moments and views.

Original mixes singular 'a beautiful moment' with 'some beautiful views' awkwardly. Use plural 'moments' to match 'views' and more natural verb 'capture' or 'take pictures of'. This corrects number agreement and improves cohesion.

× Well, it's a good question. It's different city, they will have a different view, views.

✓ Well, that's a good question. Different cities have different views.

Original has incorrect sentence structure and pronoun reference. 'It's different city' should be 'different cities' (plural) and subject-verb agreement requires 'have'. Remove unnecessary pronoun 'they' and pluralize 'views'. This fixes structure and agreement.

× So maybe in some modern city they have a very beautiful and special building.

✓ So maybe in some modern cities there are very beautiful and unique buildings.

Pronoun 'they' referring to 'some modern city' is incorrect; better to pluralize 'cities' and use 'there are' to state existence. 'Special' is acceptable but 'unique' is more natural here. This corrects pronoun reference and existence construction.

× So I will want to take a picture and when we go to the rural areas, maybe you have a beautiful sound.

✓ So I will want to take pictures, and when we go to rural areas, we might hear beautiful sounds.

Original mixes pronouns 'I', 'we', and 'you' inconsistently. Use 'we' to match 'go' and 'might hear' to express possibility. Also change 'a beautiful sound' to plural 'beautiful sounds' or uncountable 'beautiful sound' with 'hear'. This fixes pronoun consistency and verb usage for possibility.

× ID is a different memory so I don't think which is better.

✓ Each has different memories, so I don't think one is better than the other.

'ID' is unclear and likely incorrect; replace with 'Each has different memories' and use comparative structure 'one is better than the other'. Corrects pronoun/reference and comparative expression.

× I didn't I take a picture of my own hometown because is the where I had grown in, but when I go to another country I just want to remember it so it had a different feelings.

✓ I didn't always take pictures of my own hometown because it is where I grew up, but when I go to another country I want to remember it because it gives me different feelings.

Original has multiple structure errors: extraneous 'I' after 'didn't', incorrect tense 'had grown in' should be simple past 'grew up', and wrong verb forms 'had' with 'feelings'. Also 'is the where' is ungrammatical; use 'it is where'. Use consistent tense: past for growing up, present for general preference when traveling. This fixes sentence fragments, verb tense, and word order.