Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 整体表达自然，内容相关且信息量较多，但存在语法与用词小错误（如将“photography/being a photographer”误写为“Photographer is…”），句子有时略显冗长。建议：1) 注意主语和词类（把名词/动名词短语正确放入句子）；2) 控制答案长度（最多5句），保持句子结构清晰；3) 增加一两个具体细节（例如具体地点或一次难忘的拍摄经历），并用连接词如“because”或“for example”使逻辑更顺畅。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture memories when I travel. For example, last summer I photographed a mountain sunrise and experimented with different angles to highlight the light and shadows. I also like sharing selected shots on social media to get feedback from friends.

提案: 回答方向明确，但第一句不完整（“prefer views”需明确城市或乡村），并有用词和拼写问题（如“interest architecture”应为“interesting architecture”）。建议：1) 开门见山表明偏好（城市或乡村）；2) 修正形容词和名词搭配；3) 提供更具体的例子或比较（例如列举某城市夜景的特点）并使用连接词如“for example”或“also”。

例: I prefer urban views because the city skyline at night has dramatic lighting and interesting architecture. For example, I love watching how skyscrapers reflect in the river after sunset. I also enjoy rooftop terraces and city parks, which offer varied perspectives of urban life.

提案: 回答有情感和理由，但句子部分不完整或不够正式（如“And cheaper to travel around my own country.”应并入主句）。建议：1) 把理由用完整句表达并用连接词连接；2) 提供更具体的细节（如举例说明哪些地方或回忆）；3) 注意句子多样性，避免口语碎片化。

例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel a stronger personal connection to the landscapes and memories they evoke. For instance, coastal cliffs near my hometown always remind me of childhood trips. Additionally, it is generally cheaper and easier to travel domestically, so I can visit many different spots.

× Photographer is a relaxing hobby for me and I like to experiment with different angles and lighting to get the perfect shot.

✓ Photography is a relaxing hobby for me, and I like to experiment with different angles and lighting to get the perfect shot.

错误类型接近“文章错误/句子结构错误”。原句将职业名词“Photographer（摄影师）”用作主语，但句意想表达的是“摄影作为爱好”。应使用名词“Photography（摄影）”或短语“Being a photographer”来表达爱好。建议使用“Photography”以保持句子自然流畅；同时在并列句中在两部分之间加逗号。

× I definitely prefer views. There's something about the city skyline at night with all the views and interest architecture that I find really exciting.

✓ I definitely prefer urban views. There's something about the city skyline at night with all the lights and interesting architecture that I find really exciting.

原句中“prefer views”不明确，应补充为“prefer urban views（偏好城市景观）”。另外原句用“views and interest architecture”是错误搭配：应为“lights（灯光）”符合上下文，且“interesting architecture”中“interesting”为形容词需用完整形式。整体需调整词汇以保持语义准确。

× And cheaper to travel around my own country.

✓ And it's cheaper to travel around my own country.

此句缺少谓语动词，应使用系动词“is”构成完整句子“it's cheaper”。原句为不完整的片段，需补全谓语以符合句子结构。