Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (e.g., ‘in the countryside’, ‘online’), and limit to around 2–4 sentences. Add one specific detail or example to make your answer richer.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially in the countryside. For example, I took photos of terraced fields last month to remember the trip and later shared them with my family and on Instagram.

提案: Clarify and correct contradictions: decide whether you prefer urban or rural views and state it clearly in one sentence. Use linking words to support your reason (because, for example). Fix grammar and avoid repetition. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer rural views because the countryside is refreshing and peaceful. For example, rivers and mountains help me relax after a busy week, so I often visit villages to unwind.

提案: Make the answer more concise and grammatically correct. Use a clear topic sentence and give a specific reason or example. Avoid vague phrases like ‘most refreshment’; instead say ‘most refreshing’. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Bangladesh has diverse landscapes, from Sundarbans mangroves to tea gardens in Sylhet. For instance, visiting the tea hills always makes me feel connected to my culture and relaxed.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views especially in countryside.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially in the countryside.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'countryside' and missing comma before the adverbial 'especially'. Use 'in the countryside' for a general location and add a comma to set off the adverbial phrase. Suggestion: Add 'the' before 'countryside' and insert a comma: 'especially in the countryside.'

× It helps me to remember the place I visited and I can also share the picture with my friends, family and also in online.

✓ It helps me remember the places I visited, and I can also share the pictures with my friends, family, and online.

Unnecessary 'to' after 'helps' (helps + base verb) and inconsistent singular/plural. 'Place' and 'picture' should be plural when referring generally. 'in online' is incorrect preposition usage; use 'online' without 'in'. Also add commas for list separation. Suggestion: Use 'helps me remember', pluralize nouns for generality, and use 'online' without 'in'.

× I preferred the views of urban areas as I like a countryside very much because of its refreshment, rivers, mountains.

✓ I prefer the views of rural areas because I like the countryside very much for its refreshing environment, rivers, and mountains.

Sentence shows tense and vocabulary mismatches. 'Preferred' (past) should be present 'prefer' to match question about general preference. 'Urban areas' contradicts 'countryside' so likely intended 'rural areas'. 'a countryside' is incorrect; use 'the countryside' or just 'countryside'. 'refreshment' is a noun meaning act of refreshing; use 'refreshing environment' or 'relaxing atmosphere'. Suggestion: Use present tense 'prefer', correct 'urban' to 'rural' if meaning countryside, use 'the countryside', and use 'refreshing environment'.

× It also give me inner peace, a situation where where I can breathe more peacefully.

✓ It also gives me inner peace, a place where I can breathe more peacefully.

Subject-verb agreement: 'It' requires 'gives' (third person singular). There's a repeated word 'where where'. 'Situation' is awkward here; 'place' or 'environment' is better. 'Breathe more peacefully' is acceptable but 'more peacefully' could be simplified to 'more easily' or 'calmly'. Suggestion: Use 'gives', remove the duplicated 'where', and replace 'situation' with 'place'.

× So yes, I prefer views of urban areas.

✓ So yes, I prefer views of rural areas.

This repeats the earlier contradiction where the student said they like the countryside but then claims to prefer urban areas. To be consistent with previous corrected sentence, use 'rural areas'. Ensure present tense 'prefer' is kept. Suggestion: Keep 'prefer' and choose 'rural areas' to match liking for the countryside.

× I prefer views in my own countries as my country Bangladesh is so beautiful, there are various place, various types of views that will help me to enrich my culture more deeply.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because Bangladesh is so beautiful; there are various places and types of views that help me enrich my culture.

Use singular 'country' when referring to one's own nation. 'As' can be used but 'because' is clearer. 'There are various place' needs plural 'places'. 'Will help me to enrich my culture more deeply' is wordy; use 'help me enrich my culture'. Also punctuation: use semicolon or period to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use 'country' singular, pluralize 'places', replace 'as' with 'because', and simplify the clause to 'help me enrich my culture.'

× So I think my country has the most refreshment it can.

✓ So I think my country offers the most refreshment it can.

The noun 'refreshment' is awkward; use 'refreshment' as something offered, but better phrasing is 'offers the most refreshing experiences' or 'is the most refreshing.' Also 'has the most refreshment it can' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'offers the most refreshment' or 'is the most refreshing.' Suggestion: Rephrase to 'offers the most refreshing experiences' or 'is the most refreshing' for natural English.