Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more natural and concise: begin with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use gerunds/nouns), avoid repetition, and add one specific detail with a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing views because photos help me preserve memories. For example, I often take landscape shots when I travel so I can remember the places I visited. Also, I sometimes print my favourite photos and put them in an album.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repeating phrases, and use linking words to explain reasons with specific examples. Use correct adjectives and quantifiers (e.g., "more active and energetic" → "more lively and energetic"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer urban views because I find cities more lively and energetic. For example, I enjoy photographing busy streets and modern architecture since they offer diverse colours and interesting contrasts.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and a concise reason, then add a specific supporting detail or example. Avoid vague phrases like "I always look at it"; instead explain why local scenes feel familiar. Keep sentences grammatically correct and varied.

例: I prefer views from other countries because foreign scenery feels fresh and different. For instance, when I travel abroad I enjoy photographing unique landscapes and architecture that I don't see at home, which makes my photo collection more interesting.

× I really like to take a picture of the views because I think the photo is very important to record, like memories.

✓ I really like taking pictures of views because I think photos are very important for recording memories.

Use of verb + -ing after 'like': when expressing preferences, 'like' can be followed by a gerund (taking) rather than an infinitive with 'to' (to take) for general habits. Also plural forms: 'pictures' and 'photos' are more natural for general statements. Use 'for recording memories' to show purpose and remove the awkward 'like memories.'

× So I really like to memory something.

✓ So I really like to remember things.

'Memory' is a noun, not a verb. The correct verb is 'remember.' Use 'things' (or 'memories') as the object. 'I like to remember things' or 'I like to keep memories' are correct alternatives.

× So I often take a picture.

✓ So I often take pictures.

Use plural 'pictures' for habitual actions and more natural phrasing. The singular 'a picture' is possible but in this context 'pictures' fits the general habit better.

× I prefer to. I prefer the views of urban areas because I really like the city.

✓ I prefer the views of urban areas because I really like the city.

The fragment 'I prefer to.' is incomplete and unnecessary. Remove it to make a single clear sentence. This fixes sentence structure errors and redundancy.

× So the city gives me more active and energetic, so I prefer the urban areas.

✓ The city makes me feel more active and energetic, so I prefer urban areas.

'Gives me more active and energetic' is ungrammatical because adjectives need a verb like 'make' plus 'feel' when describing emotions or states. Also remove the extra definite article before 'urban areas' and avoid repeating 'so.'

× I prefer the views from the other country because in my country I always look at it.

✓ I prefer the views of other countries because in my country I always see the same things.

'From the other country' is awkward; 'of other countries' is more natural when speaking generally. 'Look at it' is awkward for experiences of scenery; 'see the same things' or 'see them often' is clearer. Also plural 'countries' fits general preference.

× I live in here so it's quite boring to me, so I really like to see the views of other countries.

✓ I live here, so it feels quite boring to me, and I really like seeing the views of other countries.

Do not use 'in here'; use 'here.' 'It's quite boring to me' is grammatical but 'it feels quite boring to me' is more natural. Use gerund 'seeing' after 'like' when describing a preference. Replace the repeated 'so' with 'and' for smoother connection.