Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap kısa, tekrarlı ve bazı ifadeler anlamsal olarak hatalı. Daha doğal olmak için doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun, sonra 1–2 destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. Örneğin "Yes, I enjoy photographing different views" diyerek başlayın; ardından hangi tür manzaraları neden sevdiğinizi ve nasıl çekim yaptığınızı bağlaçlarla açıklayın. Ayrıca belirsiz kelimeler ("city caves", "unique wheels") yerine doğru kelimeler kullanın (ör. "cityscapes", "interesting details"). Cümle sayısını 3–4 ile sınırlayın ve fotoğrafı izlemeye davet eden ifadeyi daha doğal biçimde ekleyin ("I’d love to show you one").

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially cityscapes and interesting architectural details. For example, I like capturing the contrast between modern glass buildings and old brick streets because it tells a story. I usually wait for soft morning light to emphasize textures, and I’d be happy to show you one of my photos.

提案: Cevap kıyaslama yapıyor ama dilbilgisi ve yapı hataları var; bağlaç yok ve detaylar belirsiz. "Prefer urban to rural" şeklinde doğru kıyaslama kullanın; ardından nedenini bir veya iki spesifik örnekle destekleyin (ör. çeşitlilik, mimari, sokak hayatı). Bağlaçlarla akışı iyileştirin ("because", "for example"). Cümle sayısını 2–3 ile sınırlayın.

例: I prefer urban views to rural ones because cities have more diverse people and interesting architecture. For example, I enjoy photographing busy streets and old apartment buildings since they reveal everyday life and history.

提案: Cevap belirsiz ve anlatımda mantık hataları var ("mini flag", "good wheels"). Daha net bir tercih veya dengeli görüş sunun: ya "both" demeye devam edin ama neden dengeli olduğunu açıkla (ör. tanıdıklık vs farklı kültürler). Spesifik örnekler verin (örneğin mimari, atmosfer, yiyecek). Akıcı bağlaçlarla bağlayın ("however", "also").

例: I like views in both my country and abroad because each offers something different. At home I appreciate familiar streets and cultural details, while travelling I enjoy new architecture and atmospheres that broaden my perspective.

× Yes, I like it, like city caves and unique wheels. And I like it. Watch it this picture.

✓ Yes, I like it, like cityscapes and unique architecture. I like this picture.

The student used incorrect nouns and word forms: 'city caves' is not used to mean urban views; use 'cityscapes' or 'city scenes'. 'Unique wheels' is unclear; likely intended 'unique architecture' or 'unique buildings'. 'Watch it this picture' is an incorrect word order and verb choice; use 'I like this picture' or 'Look at this picture'. Improve by choosing correct nouns for meaning and using correct word order: subject + verb + object. Grammar problem type ID:14

× I prefer urban than rural views because they are many different people and a different. Apartment.

✓ I prefer urban to rural views because there are many different people and different apartments.

Errors: 'prefer... than' should be 'prefer... to' (incorrect conjunction/structure). 'they are many different people' should be 'there are many different people' (wrong pronoun and existential construction). 'a different. Apartment.' has punctuation and noun issues; should be 'different apartments'. Improve by using 'prefer A to B', using 'there are' for existence, and plural agreement for countable nouns. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I prefer both because my country is a mini flag and that's look like an other countries and many good wheels.

✓ I prefer both because my country is small and looks like other countries, and it has many good attractions.

Problems: 'is a mini flag' is unnatural; use 'is small' or 'is like a small country' (article issue). 'that's look like an other countries' has subject-verb agreement and article errors: use 'it looks like other countries' (no 'an' before plural 'countries'). 'many good wheels' is unclear; likely meant 'many good attractions' or 'things to see'. Improve by fixing subject-verb agreement, removing incorrect articles before plurals, and choosing appropriate nouns. Grammar problem type ID:25