Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm and gives an example, but it is long, contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrasing. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences), start with a clear topic sentence, and organize details with linking words. Correct common grammar mistakes (verb forms, articles) and use clearer vocabulary for the example.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos whenever I find something interesting or beautiful. For example, last month I photographed a bride at sunset on a quiet beach, and the warm light made the scene unforgettable. I especially like capturing sunrises and sunsets because of their colours and atmosphere.

提案: You answered directly and gave reasons, which is good. Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement, word forms) and tighten the structure: give a topic sentence, then two specific reasons linked coherently. Replace vague phrases like 'makes me more stressful' with precise expressions.

例: I prefer rural views. The countryside feels peaceful and friendly, which helps me relax after a busy week of work and study. In contrast, cities are bustling and noisy, which makes me feel tense rather than calm.

提案: The answer is clear and gives reasons, but contains grammar errors and repetition ('honestly' twice). Use one clear topic sentence, support it with two specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid redundancy and correct verb agreement and word form errors.

例: I prefer scenery in my own country. It has diverse landscapes, historic pagodas and lovely parks that I enjoy photographing, and visiting them helps me unwind. Although foreign scenery can be interesting, I feel more connected to the familiar places at home.

× To be honest, I really love taking photos whenever I go and whenever I came across something interesting or unique that catches my attention.

✓ To be honest, I really love taking photos whenever I go somewhere and whenever I come across something interesting or unique that catches my attention.

The original mixes present and past forms: 'whenever I came across' uses the simple past but the surrounding context is general/habitual, so the simple present 'come across' is required. Use 'go somewhere' to complete the idea. Keep tense consistent for habitual actions. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions (I go, I come across).

× For example once I saw a bride holding stride boutique or some like pictures sceneries like sunset or sunrise I really love.

✓ For example, once I saw a bride holding a bouquet, or I like pictures of sceneries such as sunsets or sunrises; I really love those kinds of photos.

The original sentence has unclear noun phrases ('holding stride boutique'), missing articles, and awkward structure. 'Stride boutique' is likely wrong; 'a bouquet' fits a bride, and 'pictures sceneries' is incorrect collocation. Articles are needed ('a bride', 'a bouquet', 'a sunset'). Break into clearer clauses and use plural nouns for general categories ('sunsets', 'sunrises').

× I love the scenery in the countryside, they brings peace and friendliness to people like me.

✓ I love the scenery in the countryside; it brings peace and friendliness to people like me.

'Scenery' is an uncountable singular noun, so use singular pronoun 'it' and verb 'brings' must agree with singular subject. Replace comma splice with semicolon or split into two sentences. Suggestion: Match pronoun and verb number to the noun (scenery -> it brings).

× I'm quite stressful with work and studying so I really prefer quiet and peaceful place like countryside.

✓ I'm quite stressed by work and studying, so I really prefer quiet and peaceful places like the countryside.

'Stressful' describes something that causes stress; to describe a person's feeling use 'stressed'. 'Place' should be plural 'places' when speaking generally, and 'the countryside' needs the definite article. Use 'stressed by' for cause. Suggestion: Use adjectives correctly ('stressed' for feelings) and include articles when referring to a region ('the countryside').

× City is often bustling and busy so make me more stressful.

✓ The city is often bustling and busy, so it makes me feel more stressed.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'city'. Subject-verb agreement: 'so make me more stressful' is incorrect—'make' should be 'makes' and 'stressful' wrongly describes the person as causing stress; use 'feel more stressed'. Suggestion: Use 'the city' for general reference and 'make me feel stressed'.

× Honestly, I prefer the scenery in my own country because it offers a variety of landscapes, beautiful pictures, historical pagodas and lovely parks.

✓ Honestly, I prefer the scenery in my own country because it offers a variety of landscapes, beautiful views, historical pagodas, and lovely parks.

'Beautiful pictures' is odd when referring to scenery; 'beautiful views' or 'scenic views' is more appropriate. Add Oxford comma for clarity and ensure noun parallelism. Maintain plural forms for multiple items. Suggestion: Use parallel noun forms and choose collocations appropriate for scenery ('views' not 'pictures').

× I enjoy visiting these places to relax and take photographs and honestly, the views abroad don't appeals to me as much.

✓ I enjoy visiting these places to relax and take photographs, and honestly, the views abroad don't appeal to me as much.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'views don't appeals' mixes plural 'views' with singular verb form 'appeals'; the correct verb is 'appeal'. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Use base form 'appeal' after auxiliary 'do/does'. Suggestion: After 'do/does' use the base verb (do not add -s).