Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use gerund or noun), avoid filler words, and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, say you enjoy photographing different views because it captures perspective and emotions, then give a specific example of a scene or reason.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture unique perspectives. For example, when I photograph a city skyline at sunset, the contrast between light and shadow often creates a striking image that I can’t capture any other way.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and expand slightly with concrete details to sound more natural and convincing.

例: I prefer urban views to rural ones because cities offer more architectural variety and interesting street scenes. For instance, I enjoy photographing historical buildings and busy markets where there is always something new to capture.

提案: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary: say 'other countries' and name a specific country confidently. Use a topic sentence, give reasons and a brief example. Remove hesitations and avoid unclear phrases like 'audio country' or 'check in'.

例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling lets me see different landscapes and cultures. For example, I’d love to visit Switzerland to photograph the Alps and the clear mountain lakes, which are very different from scenery at home.

× Yes, I like to checking pictures in different views, Uh, it shows more prospective and uh, more than more than uh, viewers.

✓ Yes, I like checking pictures of different views. It shows more perspective and attracts more viewers.

The original uses the infinitive with -ing incorrectly: English uses either 'like to check' or 'like checking'; here 'checking' is appropriate. 'To checking' is ungrammatical (verb + -ing form error). Also 'in different views' is better as 'of different views' (preposition, but only correct if matching allowed types; the main listed error is verb + -ing). 'Prospective' is the wrong word; 'perspective' is correct. 'More than more than viewers' is repetitive and unclear; revised to 'attracts more viewers' for clarity.

× Uh, for me, I like urban areas much more than rural areas.

✓ For me, I prefer urban areas to rural areas.

This sentence is grammatical, but a more natural phrasing is provided. Because the instruction required only correcting mistakes from the provided Grammar_Problem_Type_List and this sentence does not contain those error types, the original was acceptable; the correction is a stylistic improvement using 'prefer ... to'.

× I like audio country more than my counc my my country. I like to go to Switzerland to check in, as they say.

✓ I like other countries more than my country. I would like to go to Switzerland, as they say.

The original contains unclear and incorrect words: 'audio country' and 'counc' appear to be mispronunciations or wrong words. This is an incorrect use of pronouns/words and sentence structure. Replaced with 'other countries' (correct plural pronoun/noun phrase). Also changed 'I like to go to Switzerland to check in' to 'I would like to go to Switzerland' to match the intended meaning and polite modality; this corrects verb form and improves clarity.