Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but it is slightly repetitive and has minor grammatical issues. Make the response more natural by using one concise topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundant words like “about” after “remember.” Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “capture,” “memories,” “scenery”) and use a linking word if you add a reason.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because they help me capture memories of places I’ve visited. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets to remind me of a relaxing family holiday.

提案: Good direct response with reasons, but it is slightly wordy and uses a weak linking phrase (“Other than these”). Make the answer more natural by combining ideas into two sentences, using stronger connectors (e.g., “because” and “so”), and giving a specific example of what you find beautiful. Replace vague words like “aesthetic” with concrete descriptions.

例: I prefer rural views because the countryside is peaceful and full of natural scenery, such as rolling hills and quiet rivers. Because they are less crowded, I can take clearer, more relaxed photos without many people in the background.

提案: The answer is relevant but repetitive and contains grammar errors (e.g., “my own countries” should be singular). Be concise: state your preference, give a specific reason and an example. Avoid filler phrases like “etcetera.” Use linking words such as “for example” or “especially” to organize details.

例: I usually prefer views in my own country because it offers a wide range of landscapes. For example, I can visit mountain ranges and river valleys within a few hours’ drive, which makes exploring very convenient.

× Absolutely yes, because pictures help me to remember about the places that I have visited.

✓ Absolutely yes, because pictures help me remember the places that I have visited.

The phrase 'remember about' is incorrect in English. The verb 'remember' does not take the preposition 'about' when referring to recalling something; you say 'remember something.' Remove 'about' to form the correct verb-object structure. Suggestion: practice sentences using 'remember' directly with an object (e.g., 'I remember that day', 'I remember the place'). Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× I usually prefer to see views in my own countries because there are a large variety of different views in my own countries, such as landscape with beautiful rivers and mountains, etcetera.

✓ I usually prefer to see views in my own country because there is a large variety of different views, such as landscapes with beautiful rivers and mountains.

The speaker incorrectly used the plural 'countries' when referring to their single country; use the singular 'country'. Also 'a large variety' requires 'is' (singular 'there is') and the countable noun 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' when listing examples. Remove the repeated phrase 'in my own countries' for concision. Suggestion: match singular/plural consistently and ensure subject-verb agreement with 'a variety' (use 'there is'). Grammar Problem Type ID: 1

× I usually prefer views in rural areas because they are very beautiful and aesthetic. Other than these, rural areas are less crowded.

✓ I usually prefer views in rural areas because they are very beautiful and aesthetically pleasing. Besides that, rural areas are less crowded.

The phrase 'Other than these' is unnatural here; use 'Besides that' or 'Moreover' to add information. Also 'aesthetic' is an adjective; to describe 'they' in this context it's clearer to say 'aesthetically pleasing' or 'aesthetic' could be used attributively ('aesthetic views'). Suggestion: use appropriate linking phrase ('besides that') and correct adjective/adverb form when describing how something appears. Grammar Problem Type ID: 3