Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子结构和词汇选择需要更自然、准确。回答应直接回应问题并用1句主题句＋1-2句支持细节，避免重复和语法错误。注意名词单复数（photography）、搭配（major in）、词序和表达清晰度。可以加一两个具体例子说明为何喜欢拍摄，如拍哪类场景或用什么设备。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures. I study broadcasting and television, and photography is a required course, which helped me learn technical skills. For example, I like photographing cityscapes and candid street scenes because they capture everyday life and personal memories.

提案: 句子需要更流畅和语法正确。注意时态与介词（live in a city / have lived in the city）、词汇搭配（urban areas, cityscapes, architecture）以及名词复数与冠词。避免含糊的短语（"best basic of photograph"），用具体理由支持偏好，如建筑线条、灯光、城市氛围等，并用连接词衔接观点。

例: I prefer urban areas because I've lived in a city since childhood and I enjoy photographing architecture and street life. The sharp lines of buildings and the city lighting give me interesting compositions, and there are always different scenes to explore.

提案: 答非所问且重复前一问题的内容。首先要直接回答“本国还是其他国家”，然后给出简短原因并举例。注意避免重复句子，改正语法错误（have lived, photography, trees/flowers）。可以说明文化差异、建筑风格或旅行带来的新鲜感。

例: I usually prefer photographing views in other countries because traveling exposes me to different architectural styles and cultures. For instance, taking pictures in Europe taught me to appreciate historical facades, while traveling in Asia showed me vibrant street markets and colorful details.

× I'm a student majoring in broadcasting and television academic, so photograph is one of our requested course and I think taking pictures can bring out my memories of the past, so I really enjoy it.

✓ I'm a student majoring in broadcasting and television studies, so photography is one of our required courses and I think taking pictures can bring back my memories of the past, so I really enjoy it.

错误类型：冠词/名词形式与可数名词使用错误。解释：原句中“broadcasting and television academic”搭配不自然，应该用“broadcasting and television studies”；“photograph”用作名词单数不合适，正确名词为“photography”（指摄影这门学科）或复数“photographs”；“requested course”用法不当，常用表达是“required course(s)”或“required courses”；“bring out my memories”搭配不太自然，应为“bring back my memories”。建议：1) 将学科表达为“broadcasting and television studies”。2) 用“photography”表示摄影这门课。3) 将“requested course”改为“required courses”。4) 用“bring back”表示唤起回忆。中文建议：把“academic”改为“studies”；把“photograph”改为“photography”；把“requested course”改为“required courses”；把“bring out my memories”改为“bring back my memories”。

× I live in urban since I was a child and I think urban views are always beautiful and elegant.

✓ I have lived in the city since I was a child, and I think urban views are always beautiful and elegant.

错误类型：现在完成时 vs. 一般现在时 表达时间持续的错误。解释：句子中“since I was a child”表示动作从过去持续到现在，应使用现在完成时“have lived”而非一般现在时“live”；另外“in urban”用法不正确，应说“in the city”或“in an urban area”。建议：1) 使用现在完成时“have lived”。2) 将“in urban”改为“in the city”或“in an urban area”。中文建议：表示从过去持续到现在要用现在完成时；把“in urban”改为更自然的短语“in the city / in an urban area”。

× I regard buildings as the best basic of photograph and I enjoy these trees flower.

✓ I regard buildings as the best basis for photography, and I enjoy the flowers on these trees.

错误类型：介词和短语搭配错误。解释：原句“best basic of photograph”中“basic”名词用法不恰当，要用“basis for photography”；“of photograph”也不对，应该是“for photography”；“I enjoy these trees flower”语序和名词单复数及介词缺失，正确表达是“enjoy the flowers on these trees”或“enjoy these trees and their flowers”。建议：1) 用“basis for photography”代替“basic of photograph”。2) 将“these trees flower”改为“the flowers on these trees”或“these trees and their flowers”。中文建议：把“basic of photograph”改为“basis for photography”；把“these trees flower”改为“the flowers on these trees”或“these trees and their flowers”。

× I prefer urban areas. I live in urban since I was a child and I think urban views are always beautiful and elegant. I regard buildings as the best basic of photograph and I enjoy these trees flower.

✓ I prefer urban areas. I have lived in the city since I was a child, and I think urban views are always beautiful and elegant. I regard buildings as the best basis for photography, and I enjoy the flowers on these trees.

错误类型：冠词与可数名词、时态和搭配综合错误。解释：重复句中存在前述问题：1) “I live in urban since I was a child”应为现在完成时且“in urban”不自然；2) “best basic of photograph”搭配和名词形式错误，应为“basis for photography”；3) “these trees flower”语序和单复数错误，应为“the flowers on these trees”。建议：对照上面分别修改时态、冠词及搭配。中文建议：使用“have lived in the city since...”，把“basic of photograph”改为“basis for photography”，把“these trees flower”改为“the flowers on these trees”。