Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and natural but could be improved by giving a brief specific reason and using a linking word to expand. Avoid vague phrasing like “a lot of memories” and aim for one or two concrete details. Keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember places I’ve visited. For example, I often photograph city skylines and seaside sunsets to remind me of the atmosphere and light at that moment.

提案: Your response answers the question but is generic and uses awkward phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief comparison using linking words (for example, however, because) and a specific preference or example to support your view.

例: I don’t have a strong preference because both can be beautiful. For instance, urban views offer dramatic skylines and vibrant street scenes, whereas rural views provide peaceful landscapes and natural light.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and uses awkward, formal phrasing. Give a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then briefly justify it with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like because or therefore to make it coherent.

例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and evoke personal memories. For example, seeing a coastal cliff at home reminds me of childhood holidays, so I find those views more relaxing than foreign ones.

× Absolutely, I like taking pictures of different views simply because I gather a lot of memories with it.

✓ Absolutely, I like taking pictures of different views simply because I collect a lot of memories from them.

The phrase 'gather a lot of memories with it' is awkward and uses incorrect preposition and pronoun reference. 'Collect' is a more natural verb collocation with 'memories', and 'from them' correctly refers back to 'pictures of different views'. Use plural pronoun 'them' to match 'pictures' and preposition 'from' to indicate source. Suggested improvement: say 'collect a lot of memories from them' or 'create many memories'.

× I believe it doesn't matter if you are in an urban area or a rural area, so long as these places offer very great views.

✓ I believe it doesn't matter whether you are in an urban area or a rural area, as long as those places offer great views.

Use 'whether' not 'if' for comparisons of two alternatives. 'These places' is odd when referring to 'an urban area or a rural area'; 'those places' or 'such places' agrees better. 'Very great' is nonstandard; use 'great' or 'very good'. Also 'as long as' is a more natural conjunction than 'so long as' in this context. Suggested improvement: 'I believe it doesn't matter whether you are in an urban area or a rural area, as long as those places offer great views.'

× Preferring to see the beauty of your own country has always been a relaxing feeling for one, hence the reason why we prefer seeing views in our own country than the others.

✓ Preferring to see the beauty of one's own country has always been a relaxing feeling, which is why we prefer seeing views in our own country to those in others.

The sentence mixes pronouns ('your', 'one', 'we') inconsistently. Use a consistent impersonal pronoun like 'one's' or switch fully to 'we'. 'Hence the reason why' is redundant; 'which is why' is clearer. Comparative preposition should be 'prefer A to B', not 'prefer A than B'. Also 'the others' should be 'those in others' to refer to views in other countries. Suggested improvement: 'Preferring to see the beauty of one's own country has always been a relaxing feeling, which is why we prefer seeing views in our own country to those in other countries.'