Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and check verb forms and articles (a/an, plural).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, when I visit a coastal town I take photos of the sunrise and the harbour, which later remind me of the colours and atmosphere of that trip.

提案: Use present tense and correct articles, avoid repetition, and focus on a clear reasoned response. Provide one or two specific examples linked with connectors (because, for example, also).

例: I prefer urban views because cities show lively culture and architecture. For example, I like photographing busy squares and old streets near museums and cafés, since these scenes convey the atmosphere and activities of city life.

提案: Give a clear main preference first, then contrast with the alternative using linking words (however, but, although). Use specific vocabulary (landscapes, architecture) and correct noun forms and articles. Keep responses to 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I love the landscapes and diverse local cultures. However, I also enjoy travelling abroad to see different architecture and scenery, which often inspires new ideas for my photography.

× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of a different views.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views.

The article 'a' is incorrect before the plural noun 'views'. Use no article or 'the' depending on context. Here the plural 'different views' should have no article. Suggestion: remove 'a' when using plural nouns with 'different'.

× Capturing the interesting views make me happy in my perspective because it helped me to remember the place in the future that I I was being there at a particular time and recall all the memories.

✓ Capturing interesting views makes me happy because it helps me remember the place in the future when I was there at a particular time and recall the memories.

Multiple issues: subject 'Capturing' (singular gerund) requires singular verb 'makes' not 'make' (subject-verb agreement). 'helped' should be present 'helps' to match general statement. 'in my perspective' is awkward; remove or use 'in my view'. 'that I I was being there' is incorrect: use 'when I was there'. 'recall all the memories' -> 'recall the memories'. Suggestions: match verb number to subject, keep tense consistent for general statements, simplify phrases. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I enjoyed the view in urban area because because it really emphasised the real atmosphere, culture, events and easy access to cafes and museums which give her really good vibes.

✓ I enjoy the view in urban areas because it really emphasizes the atmosphere, culture and events, and provides easy access to cafes and museums, which give me really good vibes.

Tense: the question is general preference, so present simple 'enjoy' is appropriate rather than past 'enjoyed'. Also plural 'areas' and article 'the' before 'atmosphere' unnecessary. 'emphasised' -> 'emphasizes' for present. 'give her' is wrong pronoun; should be 'give me' to match speaker. 'because because' duplicate; remove one. Suggestions: use present tense for general preferences, correct pronouns and plurality. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I enjoy the view in my country because I like the landscapes, valleys, floating river and in my country there are many cultures that I like more.

✓ I enjoy the views in my country because I like the landscapes, valleys and rivers, and there are many cultures I like.

'the view' -> 'the views' or 'views' better if speaking generally. 'floating river' is unclear; use 'rivers'. Repeated 'in my country' unnecessary. 'that I like more' is awkward; use 'I like' or 'that I like most' if comparative. Suggestions: avoid repetition and use plural nouns for general statements. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I also enjoy visiting other countries for the different scenery architect which gives many experience and inspiration.

✓ I also enjoy visiting other countries for the different scenery and architecture, which give me many experiences and inspiration.

'scenery architect' is incorrect word order and wrong noun; separate into 'scenery and architecture'. 'gives many experience' has agreement and count issues: 'give' plural subject requires plural verb, and 'experiences' should be plural; add 'me' as indirect object. Suggestions: separate concepts with 'and', ensure subject-verb agreement, use countable plural 'experiences'. Grammar problem type ID:26