Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and correct grammar, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect plural forms (e.g., 'this hobby' not 'this hobbies').

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph natural landscapes and wildlife because their colors and shapes inspire my creativity, and occasionally I shoot candid portraits of people to capture everyday life.

提案: Begin with a direct statement of preference, then give specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar and collocations: 'urban views' or 'city views', 'rural areas', 'at night' or 'during the night'. Avoid vague phrases and ensure sentences are concise.

例: I prefer urban views to rural ones because the city lights at night are more lively and the hustle and bustle create an energetic atmosphere. For instance, I enjoy photographing neon signs and crowded streets that show urban life.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like 'umm', and use correct grammar (e.g., 'that combine nature and modern life', 'these surroundings make'). Provide one concrete example to support your preference.

例: I prefer views in my own country because many places combine natural scenery with modern architecture, creating a unique contrast. For example, a coastal city nearby mixes beaches and contemporary skyline, which I find both exciting and beautiful.

× I am a big fan of photography and I really like taking pictures of different views especially nature, animals and also sometimes I do take pictures of people around me and I do find this hobbies interesting because it helps me to become more creative.

✓ I am a big fan of photography and I really like taking pictures of different views, especially of nature and animals. Sometimes I also take pictures of people around me, and I find these hobbies interesting because they help me become more creative.

Errors: incorrect article and plural after 'this' and inconsistent use of 'do' with simple present. 'especially nature, animals' needs 'of' to link 'pictures of'. 'this hobbies' incorrect; 'hobbies' plural requires 'these'. Using 'do take' and 'do find' is unnecessary in affirmative simple present; use 'take' and 'find'. Also pronoun agreement: 'it helps me' should be 'they help me' to match plural 'hobbies'. Suggestions: use 'pictures of', replace 'this' with 'these', remove unnecessary 'do' auxiliaries in positive statements, ensure pronouns agree with plural nouns.

× Personally I think I prefer urban areas view more than rural area because I do find lights during night at the city more lively and I also love the vibe of busy city where people going in.

✓ Personally, I think I prefer views in urban areas more than in rural areas because I find the lights in the city at night more lively, and I also love the vibe of a busy city where people are going about their business.

Errors: 'urban areas view' should be 'views in urban areas' (preposition and word order). 'rural area' should match plural or include article: 'rural areas' or 'the rural area'. 'lights during night at the city' incorrect prepositions and word order; use 'lights in the city at night'. Missing article before 'busy city' and missing verb in 'where people going in' — needs 'are going about' or 'are walking'. Suggestions: use 'in' for locations, place 'at night' after location, include articles where needed, and supply appropriate verb forms.

× I would say I prefer views in my own country because we have a lot of umm scenic views where it combines nature and also the modern lifestyle and I would say this surrounding make the atmosphere more exciting and beautiful.

✓ I would say I prefer views in my own country because we have a lot of scenic views where nature and modern lifestyle combine, and I would say these surroundings make the atmosphere more exciting and beautiful.

Errors: unnecessary filler 'umm' removed. 'a lot of umm scenic views' fine but 'where it combines' uses incorrect pronoun and verb; 'where nature and modern lifestyle combine' is correct. 'this surrounding' should be plural 'these surroundings' to match 'a lot of views', and verb must agree: 'make' (plural) is correct as used in correction. Suggestions: remove filler words, use proper subject for verb 'combine', ensure demonstrative matches number ('these' for plural) and subject-verb agreement.