Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and add a little detail about what kinds of views you prefer and why to make the answer more vivid. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “for example,” “because”). Avoid repeating phrases like “I do it.”

例: Yes — I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially landscapes and city skylines. For example, when I travel I often photograph sunsets and famous buildings because the light and architecture create striking compositions.

提案: Correct grammar and make the comparison clearer. Start with a direct topic sentence stating your general preference or flexibility, then give a concise example with reason. Use linking words (e.g., “however,” “for example,” “because”) and avoid vague phrases like “has a vibe which I can't explain.”

例: I don't have a fixed preference; it depends on the place. For example, I love photographing urban scenes like New York because the dynamic architecture and lighting create dramatic photos, whereas rural landscapes are calmer and offer natural details.

提案: Make a direct, natural opening sentence and give one brief reason to support your view. Use correct phrasing (e.g., “in their own way”) and avoid repeating ‘all’ excessively. Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting detail.

例: I enjoy views both at home and abroad because each country has unique scenery. For instance, local familiar spots feel comforting, whereas foreign places often offer new colors, architecture, and cultural scenes that inspire me.

× It depends of where I am.

✓ It depends on where I am.

Use the correct preposition: the fixed expression is 'depend on', not 'depend of'. Replace 'of' with 'on'. Suggestion: learn common verb+preposition collocations (e.g., depend on, rely on).

× For example, when I've been to New York, the city is very has a vibe which I can't explain and it's very beautiful.

✓ For example, when I went to New York, the city has a vibe that I can't explain and it's very beautiful.

The clause referring to a specific past visit should use simple past ('I went') rather than present perfect ('I've been') because the speaker then describes impressions from that trip. Also remove the extra 'is' before 'has' (subject-verb order): use 'the city has a vibe' or 'the city is very vibrant'. Use 'that' instead of 'which' in this restrictive clause. Suggestion: use simple past for finished past events and check subject-verb order.

× All countries are different and in my opinion they are all beautiful by their own way, so I prefer all of them.

✓ All countries are different and, in my opinion, they are all beautiful in their own way, so I like them all.

Use the correct possessive pronoun 'their' (not 'they are own') and the correct preposition 'in their own way' instead of 'by their own way'. Also 'prefer all of them' is awkward — 'like them all' or 'I like all of them' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'their' for plural possessive and memorize common expressions like 'in its/their own way'.