Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the sentence grammatically correct, concise, and add a brief reason or example. Use a clear topic sentence followed by one supporting detail and a linking word. Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views when I travel. For example, I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes with my friends because it helps us remember the trip and share our experiences later.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then provide specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (use 'prefer', plural/singular forms, and avoid repetition). Keep it concise and natural.

例: I prefer rural views because they are cleaner and greener. For instance, I enjoy open fields and forests since they feel peaceful and offer better places for taking nature photos.

提案: Answer directly whether you prefer local or foreign views, then explain with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Use correct pronouns and verb forms and avoid vague generalizations.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new sights and a sense of discovery. However, I also appreciate familiar views at home because they feel comforting and meaningful.

× Yes, I am like taking picture different view when I am travelling many tireless and I am clicking photo with my friend for traveling.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views when I travel a lot, and I take photos with my friends while traveling.

Errors: incorrect use of 'am like' (should be simple present 'like') and 'taking picture' (countable noun needs plural 'pictures' and preposition 'of' before 'different views'), 'when I am travelling many tireless' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'when I travel a lot' (use simple present for habitual action), 'I am clicking photo' should be 'I take photos' or 'I am taking photos' depending on context; 'with my friend' should be plural 'friends' if plural is meant. Suggestions: use simple present for habits ('I like', 'I travel', 'I take photos'), use plural forms for countable nouns ('pictures', 'views', 'friends'), include correct prepositions ('pictures of different views', 'while traveling').

× I am prefer to rural area because they are very clean and green and mostly mostly important. All the nature is a rural area are good and prep and urban area like city area.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are usually clean and green and very important. The natural environment in rural areas is good, unlike urban areas such as cities.

Errors: 'I am prefer' uses incorrect tense/form; use simple present 'I prefer'. 'to rural area' needs plural or article: 'rural areas' or 'the rural area'. 'they are very clean and green and mostly mostly important' is awkward and repetitive; replace with 'they are usually clean and green and very important'. 'All the nature is a rural area are good' has subject-verb agreement and word order problems; correct to 'The natural environment in rural areas is good'. 'prep' is unclear and should be removed. Suggestions: use simple present for preferences, match singular/plural forms, avoid repetition, and use clear noun phrases ('natural environment', 'urban areas such as cities').

× Some people are prefer to home country because connecting to his home and other country foreign country like thrill and discovery.

✓ Some people prefer their home country because it connects them to their roots, while other people prefer foreign countries for the thrill and opportunity to discover new things.

Errors: 'Some people are prefer' uses incorrect auxiliary; use simple present 'Some people prefer'. 'to home country' needs possessive article 'their home country' or 'their home'. 'connecting to his home' mixes pronouns and is ungrammatical; use 'because it connects them to their roots'. 'other country foreign country like thrill and discovery' is ungrammatical and repetitive; rewrite as 'other people prefer foreign countries for the thrill and opportunity to discover new things'. Suggestions: use consistent plural pronouns ('people' -> 'their'), use simple present for general statements, avoid repeating words and ensure clear parallel structure when contrasting ideas.