Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), and give one or two specific supporting details about when and why you take photos. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I do. I often take pictures when I go out with friends because we visit interesting places and I like to capture memories. For example, when we explore a new neighborhood or a park, I take photos of the scenery and candid moments to remember the day.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, reduce repetition and fillers, and add a specific reason with an example. Use one linking word to connect birthplace and preference if needed.

例: I prefer views in rural areas. I was born in the countryside and I find rural scenes peaceful and quiet, which helps me relax. For instance, I enjoy walking by fields and listening to birds instead of the noise of traffic in the city.

提案: Clarify the answer and correct unclear phrases (e.g., "wheels" seems incorrect). State a direct preference, explain why with a specific reason, and avoid repetition. Use a linking word to relate past experience to current preference.

例: I prefer views in other countries now because I have already visited many cities in my own country. For example, travelling abroad allows me to see different cultures and landscapes, such as historic towns or coastal scenery I haven't experienced at home.

× Personally, yes, I like.

✓ Personally, yes, I do.

The sentence lacks the correct auxiliary verb 'do' to answer a yes/no question; using 'I like' as a short answer is incomplete. Use 'I do' or 'Yes, I do' for natural affirmative responses to 'Do you like...'. Suggestion: Use 'I do' for short answers to yes/no questions.

× I usually hang out with my friend, uh, in the team will go to uh, something, so I like to take pictures.

✓ I usually hang out with my friend; the two of us often go somewhere together, so I like to take pictures.

The original mixes pronouns and fragments ('in the team will go to something') that are unclear. 'My friend' is singular but then 'in the team will go' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence clarifies the subject ('the two of us') and uses a clear clause. Suggestion: Keep subjects consistent and use clear connectors (e.g., 'the two of us' or 'we') and avoid filler phrases.

× Well, I was born, I was born in a rural areas, but I also prefer views rural areas because I I usually feel peace and umm like umm like to be quiet.

✓ Well, I was born in a rural area, and I also prefer rural views because I usually feel peaceful and like to be quiet.

'a rural areas' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'areas' — use 'a rural area' or 'rural areas' without 'a'. 'Views rural areas' word order is wrong; use 'rural views' or 'views in rural areas'. 'feel peace' should be 'feel peaceful'. Also remove repeated words ('I I', 'umm like umm like'). Suggestion: Match singular/plural with articles and use proper adjective forms (peaceful).

× Well personally I now I prefer wheels in other countries.

✓ Well, personally now I prefer views in other countries.

'wheels' is incorrect word choice likely from mispronunciation; the question asks about 'views'. The pronoun/word is wrong, so replace with 'views'. Also add commas for clarity and order 'personally now'. Suggestion: Use the topic word 'views' consistently.

× In the past I uh, I travel many city in my own country, so now I want to experience more experience.

✓ In the past I traveled to many cities in my own country, so now I want to have more experiences.

The clause 'In the past' requires past tense 'traveled', not present 'travel'. 'many city' mixes pluralization; use 'many cities'. The phrase 'want to experience more experience' is redundant; use 'want to have more experiences' or 'gain more experience'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past actions and correct plural forms; avoid redundancy.