Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer communicates the main idea but has grammatical errors, some redundant phrases and slightly awkward wording. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, correcting grammar (e.g. avoid "you have to need" and "when you missed it"), reducing redundancy, and keeping it within 3–4 concise sentences. Add one specific example to make it more vivid.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me remember special moments. For example, I photographed a mountain sunset last year and looking at the photo brings back the colours and feeling instantly. I also like to review my pictures when I miss those places.

提案: The response answers the question but is disfluent and incomplete (last sentence trails off). Improve by giving a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons using linking words (because, moreover) and finish with a brief concluding sentence. Watch grammar: plural/singular agreement and avoid filler phrases.

例: I prefer rural views because I live in a city and see tall buildings every day, so they no longer feel special. Rural areas offer varied landscapes and fresh air, and you can see fields, rivers and open skies that contrast with the urban scene. For these reasons, I find countryside views more appealing.

提案: Your answer gives a clear preference but contains vocabulary/word-choice errors ("Rios" likely meant "views" or "scenery"), awkward phrasing and some redundancy. Make the topic sentence concise, correct word choice, and provide a specific reason or an example of what makes foreign views attractive. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: I prefer scenery in other countries because it often feels more novel and exciting than places I already know. For example, I would love to see the architecture in Japan or the landscapes in New Zealand because they would offer new colours, cultural details and experiences that I can't find at home.

× So it's really interesting of taking pictures and I enjoy a lot.

✓ So it's really interesting to take pictures and I enjoy it a lot.

Use the infinitive 'to take' after 'interesting' to express purpose or description; 'of taking' is incorrect. Also include object 'it' after 'enjoy' and 'a lot' after the verb for natural word order.

× So you have to need something to record it and you can go back to it when you missed it some days.

✓ So you need something to record it and you can go back to it if you forget it after a few days.

'Have to need' is redundant; use 'need'. 'When you missed it some days' mixes past tense and unclear timing; use present simple 'forget' for general situations and 'after a few days' for clearer time expression.

× So in rural area you can experience different views from the city and it's quite.

✓ So in rural areas you can experience views different from those in the city, and it's quite interesting.

Use plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area'. 'Different from the city' is clearer as 'different from those in the city'. The sentence ended abruptly with 'quite' so add an adjective like 'interesting' to complete the thought.

× Well, in my opinion they're both interesting, but I prefer rural areas since I live in cities so I can see those skyscrapers every day.

✓ Well, in my opinion they're both interesting, but I prefer rural areas since I live in a city and see skyscrapers every day.

Use 'a city' if referring to the student's own living environment generally; 'live in cities' suggests multiple cities. Simplify 'so I can see those skyscrapers every day' to 'and see skyscrapers every day' for natural present tense narration.

× Well, they are both great for me, but in my opinion I would prefer Rios in other countries 'cause it will be more different and new, that it's more attractive and I want to see something different from my country and I can compare and have some new experience with it.

✓ Well, they are both great, but I would prefer places in other countries because they are more different and new; that's more attractive, and I want to see something different from my country so I can compare and have new experiences.

'Rios' appears to be a wrong word; replace with 'places' or 'views'. Use plural agreement 'they are' for 'places'. Avoid 'will be' when expressing general preference; use present 'are'. 'That it's more attractive' is incorrect clause structure; use 'that's more attractive'. 'Have some new experience with it' is awkward—use 'have new experiences' and remove unclear pronoun 'it'.