Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response grammatically correct, concise, and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and correct plural and article errors (e.g., “different views,” “they have”).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because each scene can evoke different emotions. For example, a sunset by the sea feels peaceful, while a busy city skyline can seem exciting, so I often photograph both to capture those contrasts.

提案: Give a clear, direct answer and follow with a specific reason tied to concrete details. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct grammar (e.g., “urban areas,” “they show”). Avoid vague phrases like “natural people.”

例: I prefer views in urban areas because they show a variety of activities and architecture. For example, I enjoy photographing busy streets and old buildings that reveal daily life and local culture.

提案: Answer directly and give a specific reason with clearer language. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Correct grammar: “I prefer other countries, especially Japan, because…” and explain what you like about the atmosphere with one concrete detail.

例: I prefer views in other countries, especially Japan, because the streets, gardens, and traditional architecture create a unique, peaceful atmosphere. For instance, I love photographing quiet temple gardens and old wooden houses that feel very different from my home country.

× Of course I like to take a picture if it's a different views, it's have the many different emotional and different the beauty of the picture.

✓ Of course I like to take pictures of different views; they have many different emotions and show the beauty of the scene.

Errors: incorrect article and singular/plural mismatch ('a picture' with 'different views'), incorrect use of 'it's have', redundant 'different the beauty'. Correction changes 'a picture' to plural 'pictures' to match 'views', replaces 'it's have' with 'they have' for subject-verb agreement, and rephrases to 'show the beauty of the scene'. Suggestion: match singular/plural between nouns and use correct subject-verb agreement; avoid redundant words.

× I prefer in urban areas because that showed the natural people and the simple lifestyle.

✓ I prefer urban areas because they show ordinary people and a simple lifestyle.

Errors: unnecessary preposition 'in' after 'prefer' and incorrect tense 'showed'. Correction removes 'in' and changes 'showed' to present 'show' to match general preference. Also 'natural people' is unclear; 'ordinary people' or 'local people' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'prefer' directly with noun phrase (prefer urban areas) and use present tense to describe general truths.

× I prefer in urban areas because that showed the natural people and the simple lifestyle.

✓ I prefer urban areas because they show ordinary people and a simple lifestyle.

Error: 'that showed' mixes demonstrative 'that' with past tense 'showed' and does not agree with plural 'urban areas'. Use plural subject 'they' with present tense verb 'show' for subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject number and use present simple for habitual facts.

× I'm prefer the in another country because especially in Japan, I like the view in Japan and the atmosphere in everything I like and I want to.

✓ I prefer another country; for example, I especially like the views and atmosphere in Japan.

Errors: 'I'm prefer' incorrectly uses auxiliary 'am' with 'prefer'; 'the in another country' has extra article and preposition; sentence is repetitive and ends abruptly. Correction uses simple present 'I prefer', removes extra words, and streamlines content. Suggestion: do not use 'be' with stative verbs like 'prefer'; use simple present.

× I'm prefer the in another country because especially in Japan, I like the view in Japan and the atmosphere in everything I like and I want to.

✓ I prefer another country; for example, I especially like the views and atmosphere in Japan.

Errors: 'the in another country' contains wrong article and preposition; 'in Japan' repeated and 'atmosphere in everything I like and I want to' is ungrammatical and vague. Correction removes wrong article/preposition and clarifies the meaning. Suggestion: use 'prefer another country' and avoid repeating place names; be concise and state specific reasons.