Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp (số nhiều, thì), trật tự từ và độ tự nhiên. Hãy dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và rút gọn để không quá dài. Thêm liên kết ngắn để thông tin mạch lạc (ví dụ: “because”, “so”, “for example”).

例: Yes, I do. I often take photos of breathtaking views when I travel to different cities in my country because I want to keep memories of the places I visit. For example, I always photograph sunsets and historic streets to show my friends later.

提案: Cần sửa cấu trúc câu và dùng thành ngữ chính xác; tránh tiếng lắp và các cụm không rõ nghĩa như “lower the picture”. Trình bày ý chính rõ ràng, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể với liên từ (because, so).

例: I prefer urban views because they help me relax after work or studying. For example, seeing city lights and cafes makes me feel less stressed and more inspired to unwind.

提案: Cần câu trả lời trực tiếp và chính xác; sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (số nhiều, mạo từ) và nối ý mạch lạc. Nên đưa ví dụ cụ thể (tên địa điểm) và lý do vì sao thích trong nước hơn.

例: I prefer views in my own country, Vietnam, because there are many beautiful attractions such as beaches and historical sites. For example, places like Hoi An and Ha Long Bay offer unique scenery and cultural experiences.

× I often take picture of breathtaking views when I travel to another city in my country.

✓ I often take pictures of breathtaking views when I travel to another city in my country.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the student uses 'often' and talks about multiple instances of taking photos; the count noun must match plural usage. Use plural for countable nouns when referring to more than one or general repeated actions.

× If it's a beautiful scene, I often take pictures to save my memories of time I go.

✓ If it's a beautiful scene, I often take pictures to save my memories of the times I go.

The phrase 'time I go' is ungrammatical; use 'the times I go' to refer to multiple occasions. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'times' when referring to specific occasions. This corrects the expression referring to repeated visits.

× I interest in urban areas views because when I lower the picture uh when I finish my work or study is help me feel more relaxed and I can feel less stressful.

✓ I am interested in views of urban areas because when I look at the pictures after I finish my work or studies they help me feel more relaxed and less stressed.

Multiple pronoun and verb errors: 'I interest' should be passive 'I am interested' to describe a feeling. 'urban areas views' should be 'views of urban areas' (word order). 'lower the picture' is incorrect; context suggests 'look at the pictures'. 'when I finish my work or study' -> 'after I finish my work or studies'. 'is help me' should be 'they help me' agreeing with plural 'pictures'; 'I can feel less stressful' -> 'I feel less stressed'. Corrections fix subject-verb agreement, pronoun references, word order and appropriate adjective/adverb usage.

× I prefer this in my country in Vietnam, the so many beautiful tourist attraction such as beach and historical place, tourists can go there to explore more about.

✓ I prefer it in my country, Vietnam; there are so many beautiful tourist attractions such as beaches and historical sites; tourists can go there to explore more.

Several count noun and article errors: 'this' should be 'it' referring to preferring views in own country. 'the so many' is ungrammatical; use 'there are so many'. 'tourist attraction' should be plural 'tourist attractions'. 'beach' and 'historical place' should be pluralized and more natural as 'beaches' and 'historical sites'. Added 'there are' to introduce existence. These changes correct singular/plural agreement and sentence structure.