Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve sentence structure, grammar and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary repetitions and incorrect verb forms (use 'taking' -> 'take', 'I ever love' -> 'I have always loved'). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'landscapes', 'seascapes', 'greenery').

例: I enjoy taking photographs of different landscapes. For example, I often take pictures of coastal seascapes and green countryside because I find them calming and visually interesting.

提案: Clarify your preference (urban vs rural) and support it with specific reasons and linking words. Correct grammatical errors (drop unnecessary 'for', use present tense). Avoid contradictory ideas (urban areas usually have less greenery than rural). If you mean urban areas with parks or coastal cities, say so.

例: I prefer urban views, especially in cities with waterfronts and parks. For instance, I like city promenades that combine modern buildings with green spaces because they offer both convenience and pleasant scenery.

提案: Answer directly and give clear reasons using correct grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' and avoid repetition. Replace vague phrases with specific points (e.g., 'more greenery', 'familiarity', 'local culture').

例: I prefer views in my own country because I am familiar with the landscapes and I enjoy the green hills and nearby beaches. For example, I often visit a coastal town near my home where the sunsets and tree-lined roads are beautiful.

× Yes, I like to taking pictures of different views because I ever love nature, loved person.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I have always loved nature and beautiful scenes.

The verb 'like' is followed by the base verb or gerund; 'like taking' is correct rather than 'like to taking' (remove to). 'Ever love' is ungrammatical; use 'have always loved' to express a continuing past-to-present feeling. 'Loved person' is unclear and likely intended as 'beautiful scenes' or similar, so replace with appropriate noun phrase.

× So I love to taking pictures of different views like naturally Skype and greenery and Co, seaside pictures etcetera.

✓ So I love taking pictures of different views like natural skies, greenery, and seaside scenes.

Again use the gerund 'taking' after 'love' not 'to taking'. 'Naturally Skype' is incorrect wording; likely meant 'natural skies'. 'Co' is unclear and should be omitted or replaced with 'scenes' to list types of views. Clean up list punctuation and vocabulary.

× I prefer for urban, urban areas views because there are very naturally views like green greenery and also seaside views.

✓ I prefer urban views because there are many natural sights such as greenery and seaside views.

Do not use 'prefer for'; the correct structure is 'prefer urban views' or 'prefer views in urban areas'. 'There are very naturally views' is wrong: use 'many natural sights' or 'natural views'. 'Green greenery' is redundant; use 'greenery'.

× It was a very, very relaxed for mind views.

✓ They are very relaxing for the mind.

Sentence structure is incorrect: 'It was a very, very relaxed for mind views' mixes tenses and forms. Use plural 'they' to refer to views and the adjective 'relaxing' to describe effect. Use present tense 'are' for general statements.

× I prefer for my gun own country views because there are a more greenery and sky views and the seaside views so I prefer my country views on my country.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because there is more greenery, open sky, and seaside scenery, so I prefer my country's views.

Remove incorrect 'prefer for' and 'gun' (typo for 'own'). Use 'views in my own country' not 'on my country'. 'There are a more greenery' is ungrammatical; use 'there is more greenery'. 'Sky views' better as 'open sky' and 'seaside views' as 'seaside scenery'. Improve word order to be natural.