Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ve samimi, ancak tekrarlar, dolgu kelimeleri (uh, but) ve bitmemiş cümleler akıcılığı bozuyor. Konuyu doğrudan belirten net bir başlangıç cümlesi kurun, ardından 1–2 kısa destekleyici cümle ekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve bağlaçları (however, but, so) doğru yerlerde kullanarak mantıklı akış sağlayın. Ayrıca cümlenizi 4–5 cümleyle sınırlayın ve örnek verin (hangi anılara fotoğraf çektiğinizi kısaca belirtin).

例: I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me keep memories of special places. However, I try not to spend all my time behind the camera; I also like to look around and appreciate the scene with my own eyes. For instance, when I visit a new city I take a few photos of the skyline and then walk around to enjoy the atmosphere.

提案: Cevabınızda fikir açık ama kelime seçimi ve telaffuz hataları ("reefs" yerine "views"), kopuk cümleler ve eksik ifadeler akışı zayıflatıyor. Önce açık bir konu cümlesi söyleyin (I prefer urban views), sonra nedenini iki kısa destek cümlesiyle açıklayın ve bir örnek veya karşılaştırma ekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarlardan kaçının ve doğru kelimeleri kullanın (cosmopolitan, vibrant, architecture).

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and architecture of big cities. Cities like New York or Paris have striking skylines and lively streets that feel exciting. In contrast, rural views are calmer, which I also appreciate sometimes, but for photography and atmosphere I usually choose urban scenes.

提案: Cevabınızda fikir net; fakat tekrarlar (Turkey, Turkey), kelime hataları ("weaves" yerine "landscapes"), gramer ve tamamlanmamış cümleler anlaşılırlığı azaltıyor. Net bir konu cümlesi kurun, ülkedeki farklı bölgelerden 1–2 spesifik örnek verin (ör. kıyılar, dağlar, tarihi şehirler) ve nedenini kısa bir sonuç cümlesiyle pekiştirin. Kelime seçimini düzeltin ve cümleleri tamamlayın.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Turkey offers very diverse landscapes. For example, I can see beautiful coastlines on the Aegean and Mediterranean, dramatic mountains in the east, and historic cityscapes in places like Istanbul. These varieties make it special for me and worth exploring at home.

× I really like taking pictures of different views because I love having my memories, but uh, it's really important to not spend all your time on taking pictures and videos.

✓ I really like taking pictures of different views because I love having memories, but it's really important not to spend all your time taking pictures and videos.

The phrase 'having my memories' is unnatural; 'having memories' or 'preserving memories' is correct. Also, 'important to not spend' is better as 'important not to spend' because split infinitives are awkward; 'on taking pictures' is unnecessary after 'spend all your time'. Suggestion: use 'having memories' and remove extra prepositions to make the sentence concise.

× So I really prefer to enjoy the moment and see the all beautiful and magical views with my eyes.

✓ So I really prefer to enjoy the moment and see all the beautiful and magical views with my eyes.

The placement of the definite article is wrong: 'the all beautiful' should be 'all the beautiful' or simply 'the beautiful'. Correct order is 'all the + adjective + noun'. Suggestion: use 'see all the beautiful...' or 'see the beautiful...'.

× So of course I, uh, prefer to take some pictures and reduce, but I'm but.

✓ So of course I prefer to take some pictures and then put my camera away to enjoy the rest of the moment.

Original sentence is incomplete and contains false starts ('reduce, but I'm but'). This is a sentence structure problem—fragmented and unclear. Suggestion: complete the idea by saying what 'reduce' refers to, e.g., 'reduce taking photos' or express the action: 'take some pictures and then put my camera away'.

× I prefer reefs in urban areas because I really like to be a part of and cosmopolitan cities such as New York, Paris, Milan and Rome.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I really like being part of cosmopolitan cities such as New York, Paris, Milan and Rome.

The word 'reefs' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'views'. Also 'to be a part of and cosmopolitan cities' is ungrammatical. Use the gerund 'being part of' and remove the extra conjunction. Suggestion: replace 'reefs' with 'views' and use 'being part of cosmopolitan cities'.

× It's really, I love big cities and I love the enthusiasm in the big cities, so it's really more magical for me to watch the view in the urban areas rather than rural areas.

✓ I love big cities and the energy they have, so it's more magical for me to see views in urban areas rather than in rural areas.

Awkward repetition and word choice: 'enthusiasm in the big cities' is odd; 'energy' or 'vibrancy' is better. 'Watch the view' should be 'see views'. Also article use: 'in rural areas' needs 'in'. Suggestion: use 'see views' and 'energy' and avoid repetition.

× I love people, I love crafted.

✓ I love people; I appreciate craftsmanship.

'I love crafted' is ungrammatical—'crafted' is an adjective or past participle needing an object. Likely intended 'craft' or 'craftsmanship'. Suggestion: use 'I appreciate craftsmanship' or 'I love handcrafted things'.

× I prefer the views in my own country since I live in Turkey.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because I live in Turkey.

'Since' can mean 'because' or 'since (time)'; while not strictly incorrect, 'because' is clearer here to express reason. This addresses 'There be issue' loosely as clarity in existential/time expressions. Suggestion: use 'because' when giving reasons.

× I believe that Turkey, Turkey has one of the best weaves in all its regions.

✓ I believe that Turkey has some of the best views in all its regions.

'Weaves' is incorrect; intended word is 'views'. Repeating 'Turkey' is redundant. Suggestion: use 'some of the best views' and remove duplicate word.

× It's there's so many multiple choices and places that you can go visit and experience and other things and the another side of the nature.

✓ There are many choices and places you can visit to experience different aspects of nature.

Original is ungrammatical and repetitive: 'It's there's', 'so many multiple choices' and 'the another side of the nature' are incorrect. Use 'There are' for plural existence, avoid 'multiple choices' redundancy, and say 'different aspects of nature'. Suggestion: simplify and use correct 'there are' structure.

× So I really believe that Turkey is one of.

✓ So I really believe that Turkey is one of the best countries for scenic views.

Sentence is incomplete ('one of' what?). This is a sentence structure error—finish the comparative phrase by specifying the group. Suggestion: complete with 'one of the best countries for scenic views' or similar.