Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 많이 중복되고 문법적인 오류가 있습니다. 우선 간단한 주제문을 말한 뒤 이유를 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적인 이유로 뒷받침하세요. 불필요한 반복을 피하고 시제와 관사 사용(예: "a picture", "the view")을 정확히 하세요. 또한 연결어(예: "because", "so", "which helps me")를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어보세요.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me relax. For example, I often photograph city skylines and mountain scenes, and looking at these photos later reminds me of peaceful moments.

提案: 답변이 간단하긴 하지만 자세한 이유와 구체적인 예시가 부족합니다. 먼저 선호를 분명히 말한 뒤 이유(예: 조용함, 자연의 색채)와 구체적인 예(예: 해질녘의 색깔, 사진을 찍는 방식)를 추가하세요. 문법적으로는 관사와 어순을 바로잡고, 연결어로 문장 흐름을 개선하세요.

例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more scenic. For instance, when I travel to the countryside I like to photograph sunsets over fields since the colors and calm atmosphere make more striking pictures.

提案: 문법과 어휘 선택에 큰 오류가 있어 의사 전달이 불분명합니다. 비교를 할 때는 정확한 표현(예: "I prefer views in other countries")을 사용하고, 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: 다른 문화, 다양한 풍경). 과거 시제와 현재 시제를 혼동하지 않도록 주의하세요.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different cultures and landscapes. For example, I enjoyed photographing traditional markets and coastal cliffs abroad, which felt more novel and inspiring than familiar scenes at home.

× Yes, I like the I take.

✓ Yes, I like the photos I take.

The original sentence is ungrammatical due to extra words and unclear noun usage. Replace the phrase 'the I take' with a clear noun phrase 'the photos I take' to indicate possession and clarify meaning. Use a noun (photos) after 'like' and a relative clause 'I take' to modify it.

× I like to take a picture different view because when I when I saw the view a picture of the view, I feel the relaxation.

✓ I like to take pictures of different views because when I see a picture of a view, I feel relaxed.

Multiple structural problems: use plural 'pictures' to match 'different views', use preposition 'of' after 'pictures', and correct verb tenses and forms. Change 'when I saw' to 'when I see' for general truth, and 'I feel the relaxation' to idiomatic 'I feel relaxed'. Remove repeated words.

× It is good for me.

✓ It is good for me.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the context; no change needed.

× I like the rural areas.

✓ I like rural areas.

While 'the rural areas' is not strictly wrong, in this general preference context native speakers usually omit the definite article and say 'rural areas'. Use the plural without 'the' to express a general preference.

× When I go to the travel, I like to picture of the sunset, so I take them.

✓ When I travel, I like to take pictures of the sunset, so I take them.

Use 'travel' without 'go to' for the general activity. The verb phrase should be 'take pictures of' not 'like to picture of'. Place 'take' before 'pictures' and use plural 'pictures' to match 'them'.

× I like it.

✓ I like them.

The pronoun 'it' refers to a singular noun, but the speaker refers to multiple pictures ('pictures of the sunset'), so use the plural pronoun 'them' for agreement.

× I prefer to other countries view because when I went to the other country, it is something interesting of all of that.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because when I go to another country, everything is interesting.

Use 'views in other countries' for natural prepositional phrasing. Use present tense 'go' to indicate habitual preference, and 'another country' to refer to any single foreign country. 'Something interesting of all of that' is ungrammatical; replace with 'everything is interesting'.

× So just to see is the very good.

✓ So just seeing them is very enjoyable.

Original lacks proper subject and verb order. Use gerund 'seeing' as subject and 'them' to refer to views/pictures. 'Very good' is vague; 'very enjoyable' is more natural. Adjust word order to 'Just seeing them is very enjoyable.'