Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ: thay "extremely fond of" (cấu trúc sai sau động từ) bằng "I'm very fond of" hoặc "I really enjoy"; dùng từ đúng (sceneries → scenery hoặc views); rút gọn câu tránh lặp ý và giảm filler ("to be honest", "because it's a good way for me" lặp). Cấu trúc câu nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó dùng 1–2 câu bổ trợ có liên kết (e.g., "Firstly", "Secondly"). Giữ tối đa 5 câu và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. Firstly, photography helps me capture memorable moments from my life. Secondly, it relaxes me after a long day at work, allowing me to unwind and forget about stress.

提案: Giảm sử dụng filler (umm, uh) và sửa lỗi từ vựng/ngữ pháp: "if I fail to choose" không tự nhiên — dùng "if I had to choose"; "catch your pictures" sai — dùng "take pictures"; "extremely like" → "really like"; số nhiều/ít: "rural area" → "rural areas"; câu nên rõ ràng với topic sentence và 1–2 lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ như "Firstly" hoặc "Because".

例: If I had to choose, I prefer taking pictures in rural areas. Firstly, rural scenes often show a peaceful and quiet atmosphere, which I find calming. Also, the natural landscapes there offer more interesting subjects, like fields and traditional houses.

提案: Tránh lặp từ ("You know") và sửa ngữ pháp: "has a rich reputations" → "has a strong reputation"; "tourist destination" → "tourist destinations"; câu cuối lủng củng — nên nói rõ bạn đã thăm những vùng nào và vì sao thích. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (e.g., "I prefer views in my own country") rồi nêu 1–2 lý do, cụ thể hóa ví dụ bạn đã trải nghiệm (những vùng nào). Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

例: I prefer views in my own country. Vietnam has a strong reputation for beautiful landscapes, from the central coast up to the north. For example, I have visited places in the central region and the north, and I especially love their varied scenery and local culture.

× Well, to be honest, I extremely fond of taking pictures of different sceneries because it's a good way for me to capture the memorable moments that I experience during my life.

✓ Well, to be honest, I am extremely fond of taking pictures of different scenes because it's a good way for me to capture memorable moments I experience in my life.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for adjective complement (subject + be + adjective). 'Extremely' modifies 'fond' so word order is fine. 'Sceneries' is uncountable/rare; use 'scenes' or 'landscapes'. 'The memorable moments that I experience during my life' is wordy; use 'memorable moments I experience in my life' or simply 'memorable moments'. Suggestion: include appropriate form of 'be', prefer 'scenes' or 'landscapes', and simplify relative clause. Grammar problem type and ID: 27 Subject-verb agreement errors.

× And the second reason is that taking pictures is a good way for me to release all my stress after working a long day.

✓ The second reason is that taking pictures is a good way for me to relieve all my stress after a long day of work.

Incorrect verb choice: 'release stress' is less natural; use 'relieve stress'. Word order 'after working a long day' is awkward; use 'after a long day of work'. Also remove leading 'And' in formal answer. Suggestion: use 'relieve' and correct phrase 'after a long day of work'. Grammar problem type and ID: 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs.

× Umm, if I fail to choose, I tend to, uh, catch your pictures in the rural areas due to some reasons.

✓ If I had to choose, I would tend to take pictures in rural areas for several reasons.

Incorrect tense and modal structure: 'if I fail to choose' is wrong conditional; use 'if I had to choose' or 'if I had to choose'. 'I tend to' + conditional should be 'I would tend to'. 'Catch your pictures' is incorrect collocation; use 'take pictures'. 'The rural areas' unnecessary article; use 'rural areas'. 'Due to some reasons' is non-native; use 'for several reasons'. Suggestion: use proper conditional form and natural collocations. Grammar problem type and ID: 6 Present tense issue.

× First and foremost, umm, I extremely like the views in the rural area because it will illustrate the peace and the quiet atmosphere, which is one of my favorite things.

✓ First and foremost, I really like the views in rural areas because they portray a peaceful and quiet atmosphere, which is one of my favorite things.

Adverb placement: 'extremely like' is unnatural with 'like'; use 'really like'. 'The rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' or 'the countryside'. 'It will illustrate' wrong number and tense; use plural subject 'they' and present tense 'portray'. 'The peace and the quiet atmosphere' is wordy; use 'a peaceful and quiet atmosphere'. Suggestion: match plural subjects and use natural adverb choices. Grammar problem type and ID: 20 Incorrect adverb placement.

× You know, Vietnam is famous for its beautiful landscape and has a rich reputations for its beauty.

✓ Vietnam is famous for its beautiful landscapes and has a rich reputation for its beauty.

Number agreement: 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' when speaking generally. 'A rich reputations' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'reputations'; use 'a rich reputation' or 'rich reputations' without 'a'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches articles. Grammar problem type and ID: 1 Singular and plural issue.

× You know, there are lots of tourist destination in my country and I experience, let me see three areas from the central to the north of Vietnam and I extremely love it.

✓ There are lots of tourist destinations in my country, and I have visited, let me see, three areas from central to northern Vietnam, and I really love them.

Plural agreement: 'tourist destination' should be 'tourist destinations'. Verb tense/structure: 'I experience' is wrong here; use 'I have visited' or 'I visited'. 'From the central to the north of Vietnam' is awkward; use 'from central to northern Vietnam'. Pronoun agreement: 'I extremely love it' should match plural 'areas' so 'I really love them'. 'Extremely' with 'love' is acceptable but 'really' is more natural. Suggestion: correct plural nouns, use present perfect for experiences, and ensure pronoun agreement. Grammar problem type and ID: 1 Singular and plural issue.