Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you like taking pictures, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words (uh, well) and unclear phrases. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct vocabulary (e.g., “scenery” instead of “views” repeatedly) to make your answer natural and effective.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different scenery because it helps me capture memorable moments. For example, I like photographing sunsets and city skylines as they show light and color changes. Also, taking photos encourages me to explore new places and notice small details.

提案: Answer directly and provide a clear reason and a brief comparison. Correct grammar and unclear phrases (e.g., “ubank escape” is not correct). Use linking words like “because” and “however” to structure the reply, and give one specific example of what you like about urban views.

例: I prefer urban views because I live in a city and enjoy the architecture and lively streets. For instance, I love photographing modern buildings and busy markets. However, I also appreciate my rural hometown for its peaceful landscapes and green fields.

提案: State your preference clearly and give specific reasons. Replace unclear words (e.g., “skates”) with correct vocabulary such as “landscapes” or “scenery.” Use linking phrases like “because” and “for example” and mention a concrete aspect of foreign views you enjoy (architecture, food, traditions). Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultural experiences. For example, I enjoy seeing historic architecture and local festivals that are very different from what I see at home. Traveling abroad also helps me learn about new traditions and ways of life.

× Well, I think I like taking pictures of different views.

✓ Well, I enjoy taking pictures of different views.

The original sentence repeats 'I think' and 'I like', which is grammatically acceptable but redundant. Replacing with 'I enjoy' uses present simple to express a habitual preference more naturally.

× Uh, in my opinion, I think taking pictures of different views can improve.

✓ Uh, in my opinion, taking pictures of different views can improve my photography skills.

The original lacks an object for 'improve', causing a sentence fragment. Adding 'my photography skills' completes the idea and uses present simple modal-cause structure correctly.

× We ever had gun displays, so I like taking pictures of different views.

✓ I have seen gun displays before, so I like taking pictures of different scenes.

'We ever had' is ungrammatical in this context. Use present perfect 'I have seen' to indicate experience. 'Different views' repeated; 'scenes' is more natural. Also ensure subject matches singular first person.

× Well I prefer urban areas because actually I live in urban areas so I only can see a ubank escape.

✓ Well, I prefer urban areas because I actually live in a city, so I can only see urban scenery.

'I live in urban areas' is plural and awkward when referring to one's city; use 'a city' or 'urban area'. 'Only can see' should be 'can only see' for correct adverb placement. 'ubank escape' appears to be misheard; replace with 'urban scenery'.

× But my hometown is rural areas so I also like but I prefer urban.

✓ But my hometown is rural, so I also like rural views, though I prefer urban ones.

'Hometown is rural areas' mixes singular and plural; use 'rural'. 'I also like but I prefer urban' is fragmented—add 'though' and use 'ones' to avoid repeating 'views.'

× Well, be honest, I like in other countries I prefer views because we can see different skates and we can learn the local culture, local traditional.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in other countries because we can see different landscapes and learn about local culture and traditions.

'Be honest' should be 'To be honest'. Word order 'I like in other countries I prefer views' is confused; rephrase to 'I prefer views in other countries.' 'Skates' is incorrect—likely 'scapes' or 'landscapes.' 'Local traditional' should be 'local culture and traditions.'

× So I I prefer like other country.

✓ So I prefer other countries.

The original has repetition 'I I' and awkward 'prefer like other country.' Simplify to 'I prefer other countries.' Use plural 'countries' to match general preference.