Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct small grammar issues. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers like "kind of" and redundant phrases. Also correct tense/word choice (e.g., "bring" → "take").

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel alone I always take my camera to capture cityscapes and landscapes, because I enjoy preserving memories and studying light and composition.

提案: Correct subject-verb agreement and remove filler words. Give one clear reason with a linking word (e.g., "because") and a brief specific example. Keep answer within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I like panoramic cityscapes. For instance, I often climb the tallest tower or hill to photograph how streets and buildings fit together and to capture well-known landmarks from above.

提案: Avoid hesitations and fix grammar (e.g., "I am already get used" → "I am already used"). Give a concise reason and a specific example of what you find different or special abroad. Use a linking word like "because" or "so".

例: I prefer views in European countries because their architecture and historic skylines feel unique to me. For example, I love photographing cobbled streets and old cathedrals there, which look very different from the modern buildings in my hometown.

× I enjoy seeing how streets and buildings fits together and noticing landmarks from above.

✓ I enjoy seeing how streets and buildings fit together and noticing landmarks from above.

Subject 'streets and buildings' is a compound plural subject, so the verb should be plural 'fit' not 'fits'. Use plural verb to agree with plural subject. Suggestion: identify the subject; compound subjects joined by 'and' take plural verbs.

× I guess that's because I am already get used to the views in my country and those uh, special views in here in these countries are breathtaking.

✓ I guess that's because I am already used to the views in my country, and those special views here in these countries are breathtaking.

The phrase 'am already get used to' mixes present continuous 'am' with base verb 'get' incorrectly. The correct form is 'am already used to' (stative passive) or 'have already gotten used to' (present perfect with 'get' in past participle). Also 'in here in these countries' is redundant and awkward; use 'here in these countries' or simply 'in these countries'. Remove filler 'uh' in formal speech. Suggestion: use 'am used to' for current state or 'have gotten used to' for change over time, and simplify location phrases.