Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and clear with personal detail, but it has some repetition and minor grammar issues. Make the response more concise by giving a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and correcting tense and phrasing. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases like "I've been here" twice.

例: Yes — I really enjoy photographing different views. I take photos almost every day with my phone to preserve memories, and I often post the best shots on social media so I can look back on places I’ve visited.

提案: Good personal preference and expressive language, but avoid awkward phrasing and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then provide specific reasons and an example. Use linking words such as "because" or "for example" and correct articles and plural forms (e.g., "farms").

例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy photographing mountains, farms, and open scenery. For example, when I visit the countryside I focus on wide landscapes and natural light, which feel calming and inspire more creative photos.

提案: You convey your idea but the answer is unclear and incomplete; avoid hesitations and finish your thought. Provide a direct topic sentence (e.g., I don’t have a strong preference), then explain with a specific reason and a brief example. Remove filler words like "umm" and finish sentences fully.

例: I don’t have a strong preference between photos taken at home or abroad because what matters most is how the place makes me feel. For instance, when I visited Thailand I took many photos simply because the colors and atmosphere made me happy and inspired me to capture the moment.

× I post it on my social media for a reminder that I've been here or I've been, I've visit the place.

✓ I post it on my social media as a reminder that I've been here or I've visited the place.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('I've been') with an incorrect base form 'visit' after 'I've'. After 'have/has' the past participle form is required. Use 'visited' (past participle) to match 'I've'. Also 'for a reminder' is better expressed as 'as a reminder' for natural collocation.

× Actually, it depends where I'm going or visiting to, but for me I prefer to have to go to rural areas where I can see beautiful mountains, scenery, farm.

✓ Actually, it depends on where I'm going or visiting, but I prefer to go to rural areas where I can see beautiful mountains, scenery, and farms.

Use 'depends on' rather than 'depends where'. 'Visiting to' is incorrect; use 'visiting' or 'going to'. 'Prefer to have to go' is wordy and unnatural — use 'prefer to go'. Also list items need commas and plural 'farms'. This fixes preposition use and word choice.

× I love taking pictures of different views. In fact, I'm a person who can't live without my phone, so part of it is like taking pictures daily and keeping memories together.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views. In fact, I'm a person who can't live without my phone, so I take pictures daily to keep memories.

The original phrase 'part of it is like taking pictures daily and keeping memories together' is awkward. Use the verb infinitive purpose 'to keep memories' or gerund structure consistently. Simplifying to 'I take pictures daily to keep memories' improves grammar and clarity.

× So wherever I go, I take photos and I post it on my social media for a reminder that I've been here or I've been, I've visit the place.

✓ So wherever I go, I take photos and I post them on my social media as a reminder that I've been there or I've visited the place.

Ensure pronoun number agreement: 'photos' requires 'them' not 'it'. Use 'there' after 'been'. Use past participle 'visited' after 'I've'. 'As a reminder' is a more natural collocation.

× I have nothing to compare but as long as I am in a place which makes me umm, makes me feel special and happy at the moment I love to take photo with it and I can't really.

✓ I have nothing to compare it to, but as long as I am in a place that makes me feel special and happy at the moment, I love to take photos there and I can't stop.

Several structure problems: 'compare' needs an object ('compare it to'). 'Which' should be 'that' for defining clauses. Remove filler 'umm' and duplicate 'makes me'. Use plural 'photos' and 'there' instead of 'with it'. The phrase 'I can't really' is incomplete; clarify to 'I can't stop' or 'I really can't' to complete the thought.