Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and direct. Start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Keep it under five sentences. For example, say you don’t enjoy taking photos because of lack of skill and prefer another activity, and give a brief reason why.

例: No, I don’t enjoy taking pictures of views because I’m not very skilled at photography. For instance, I often struggle with framing and lighting, so my photos don’t look good. Therefore, I prefer painting landscapes instead, since painting lets me control details and express my ideas more clearly.

提案: Answer directly with a clear preference or explain if you have no strong preference. Use linking words (however, but, although) and give a brief, specific reason or example to support your choice. Avoid vague phrases like “a little” or “I don't know what you're saying.”

例: I prefer rural views because they are usually calmer and more natural. For example, I enjoy green fields and quiet lakes, which help me relax. However, I also appreciate some urban scenes, such as city skylines at night, when I want more energy and variety.

提案: Give a clear comparative answer and support it with reasons. Use linking words (for example, because, while) and correct grammar. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear expressions like “I aboard this city.” Be specific about what you like or dislike in each place.

例: I prefer views in other countries, such as New York City, because international cities often have iconic skylines and varied architecture. For example, NYC’s skyline with tall buildings and rivers is impressive. In contrast, my local downtown is unattractive and lacks investment, so I rarely enjoy its views.

× Umm. Actually I'm not great at taking pictures so I don't like picture of.

✓ Umm. Actually I'm not great at taking pictures, so I don't like taking pictures.

The sentence misuses the singular noun 'picture' after 'like' and omits a verb form. Use the gerund 'taking pictures' to match 'I'm not great at taking pictures' and to express the general activity. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' for clarity.

× The bill I'd rather be I painting.

✓ But I'd rather be painting.

The original is ungrammatical and appears to attempt a contrast plus a preference. Remove extraneous words ('bill', the extra 'I') and use 'I'd rather be painting' to express a preference for painting instead of taking pictures. This fixes word order and structure.

× I don't like both but umm, it's a little.

✓ I don't like either, but umm, I'm not sure what you mean.

'I don't like both' is incorrect when expressing dislike of two options; use 'either'. The clause 'it's a little' is vague and doesn't complete the idea. Replace with 'I'm not sure what you mean' to convey confusion. This corrects conjunction/connector usage and completes the sentence meaningfully.

× I don't know what you're saying.

✓ I don't know what you mean.

While 'I don't know what you're saying' is grammatically possible, in conversational context asking for clarification 'I don't know what you mean' is more natural. This suggestion improves pronoun/reference clarity and idiomatic usage.

× New York City view is amazing I guess.

✓ The view of New York City is amazing, I guess.

The original lacks an article and proper noun phrase structure. Add the definite article 'the' and use 'the view of New York City' or 'New York City's view' to form a correct noun phrase. Add a comma before 'I guess' as a parenthetical comment.

× My downtown is ugly.

✓ My downtown area is ugly.

'Downtown' can be used as an adjective or noun; adding 'area' clarifies the meaning and sounds more natural in this context. This adjusts word choice for clearer expression.

× I aboard this city.

✓ I don't like this city.

'Aboard' is a preposition meaning on or into a ship/vehicle and is incorrect here. The student likely intended to say they do not like the city; use 'I don't like this city' to express dislike. This fixes the incorrect preposition and restores intended meaning.