Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 発音と流暢さを改善し、重複表現を避けて簡潔に答える練習をしましょう。また、トピックセンテンスを明確にして、補足で具体例（好きな被写体や撮影理由）を1〜2文で付け加えると効果的です。例えば、不要な語の繰り返し（「taking taking」「natural, natural」）を直し、文を2〜3文にまとめてください。

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I like both natural scenes, such as forests and rivers, and urban landscapes like city skylines. For example, I often take pictures of parks in the morning because the light is soft and peaceful.

提案: 文法と語順を整理し、簡潔に理由と具体例を述べる練習をしてください。発音ミス（“Cal”→“calm”）や不要な繰り返しを直し、接続詞を使って理由と補足を明確に繋げると良いです。回答は2〜3文で、1文目で好みを示し、2文目で理由と具体的な被写体を挙げましょう。

例: I prefer photographing in rural areas because they make me feel calm and relaxed. I especially enjoy taking pictures of animals and natural scenes, such as fields and forests, where I can capture quiet moments.

提案: 表現をより自然にし、冗長な語や口語表現（“wanna”, “like”多用）を減らしましょう。まず簡潔なトピックセンテンスで好みを示し、次に理由を1〜2文で具体的に述べます。例えば“seen everything”の言い方を訂正し、どのような新しい被写体に関心があるかを示すと良いです。

例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because I want to see new places and subjects. Traveling abroad lets me capture different cultures, architecture, and landscapes that I haven't seen at home.

× I love taking taking different kind of pictures because I love both natural, natural and organic things to take and also at the same time I love taking pictures of cities.

✓ I love taking different kinds of pictures because I like both natural and organic subjects and I also enjoy taking pictures of cities.

The student repeated 'taking' (repetition error) and used 'different kind' which should be plural 'different kinds' when referring to multiple types (quantifier + noun form). 'Natural, natural and organic things to take' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'natural and organic subjects' or 'natural and organic scenes'. Also 'I love' repeated twice in close proximity is stylistically poor; change one to 'I like' or 'I also enjoy'. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, use plural 'kinds' after 'different', and replace awkward noun phrase with 'subjects' or 'scenes' to be natural.

× I more prefer and taking picture in rural areas because although our pictures of our areas is beautiful because on the on the other hand rural areas makes me very Cal calm and relaxed so I like take taking picture of them and also particularly I love taking animals and nature so I more prefer rural areas.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because the scenery in our area is beautiful, and rural areas make me very calm and relaxed, so I like taking pictures of them. In particular, I love photographing animals and nature, so I prefer rural areas.

There are multiple issues: 'I more prefer' is incorrect word order; use 'I prefer' or 'I prefer ... more'. 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures'. 'our pictures of our areas is beautiful' has subject-verb disagreement and awkward possessive; use 'the scenery in our area is beautiful' (singular subject with 'is'). 'rural areas makes' should be 'rural areas make' (plural subject requires plural verb). 'I like take taking picture' has wrong verb forms; use 'I like taking pictures'. Suggestions: use correct verb forms and agreement (plural/singular), fix word order ('prefer' before object or 'prefer ... more'), and use consistent plural 'pictures'.

× I more prefer and taking picture in rural areas because although our pictures of our areas is beautiful because on the on the other hand rural areas makes me very Cal calm and relaxed so I like take taking picture of them and also particularly I love taking animals and nature so I more prefer rural areas.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because the scenery in our area is beautiful, and rural areas make me very calm and relaxed, so I like taking pictures of them. In particular, I love photographing animals and nature, so I prefer rural areas.

Problems with prepositions and articles: use 'taking pictures in rural areas' not 'taking picture in'. 'Scenery in our area' is more natural than 'pictures of our areas'. 'On the other hand' was misplaced and unnecessary. Use 'photographing animals' instead of 'taking animals'. Suggestion: choose accurate prepositions ('in' for location) and nouns ('scenery') to convey meaning clearly.

× I would say in other countries because although I love my own country, but I think I've seen all of the things in my within my country. So I wanna like take a picture of new things that makes me refreshed and yeah, curious about it. So I wanna go following countries and take a picture of like many kind of different things.

✓ I would say in other countries because, although I love my own country, I think I have seen most things in my country. So I want to take pictures of new things that make me feel refreshed and curious. I want to visit other countries and take pictures of many different things.

Tense and modality corrections: 'I've seen all of the things in my within my country' is redundant and ungrammatical; use present perfect 'I have seen most things' or 'I have seen everything' depending on meaning. 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'take a picture of new things that makes me refreshed' has subject-verb agreement: 'things that make me feel refreshed' (make, not makes). 'go following countries' is incorrect; use 'visit other countries'. 'many kind of different things' should be 'many different things' or 'many kinds of different things'. Suggestions: use standard forms ('want to'), ensure subject-verb agreement, choose correct verbs ('visit'), and simplify noun phrases.

× I would say in other countries because although I love my own country, but I think I've seen all of the things in my within my country.

✓ I would say in other countries because, although I love my own country, I think I have seen everything in my country.

The phrase 'all of the things' is wordy and unnatural; 'everything' or 'most things' is better. Also remove the redundant 'my within my'. Articles: 'the things in my country' is possible, but 'everything in my country' is more natural. Suggestion: avoid redundant words and choose concise expressions like 'everything'.