Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “for example I am traveling” and “when I am traveling” convey the same idea).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially while travelling, because photos help me remember special moments. For example, when I visited the coast last year I took several landscape shots to capture the light and colours so I can look back on the trip later.

提案: Begin with a direct statement, then give two specific reasons linked clearly. Reduce filler words (“like”, “that”) and avoid repeating the same idea. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., peaceful, restorative) to show range.

例: I prefer rural views because I find mountains and open countryside very peaceful. In particular, seeing green forests and rolling hills helps me relax and feel refreshed after a busy week.

提案: Make the answer more fluent and specific: state your preference, give a clear reason and a brief example or consequence. Avoid repeating the same phrase and correct small grammar (e.g., “new experience” → “new experiences”).

例: I prefer views in other countries because the scenery is different from what I see at home, which makes travel more exciting. For example, I enjoyed the architecture and coastal landscapes in Portugal because they felt fresh and inspired me to try new activities.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views especially when I am traveling because for example I am traveling, I like to look back on the moment that I am on the place. That's why I like taking pictures also for memories.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I am traveling, because I like to look back on the moments when I was in those places. That's why I also take pictures for memories.

Errors: awkward present participle phrasing and incorrect tense/phrase choice. 'For example I am traveling' is redundant; use a single clause. 'Look back on the moment that I am on the place' mixes present continuous with location and is unnatural; use 'look back on the moments when I was in those places.' Also change 'like taking pictures also for memories' to 'also take pictures for memories' to be more natural. Suggestions: remove redundancy, match tense (past for referring to completed experiences), use 'moments' plural and 'in those places' for correct preposition and reference.

× For me, I prefer rural areas because I love mountains and it gives me so much peace when I am seeing like green trees, green plants like that.

✓ For me, I prefer rural areas because I love mountains and they give me so much peace when I see green trees and plants like that.

Errors: incorrect subject-pronoun agreement and awkward preposition/verb use. 'It gives me so much peace' is incorrect because 'mountains' is plural; use 'they give.' 'When I am seeing' is an unnatural progressive form for a general statement; use simple present 'when I see.' Remove filler 'like' before listing items or use it only once. Suggestions: match subject and verb number, use simple present for habitual or general facts, and simplify with concise noun phrases.

× It is healing and also relaxing at the same time.

✓ It is healing and relaxing at the same time.

Error: redundancy and wordiness rather than strict grammatical error. 'Also' and 'at the same time' both indicate addition/ simultaneity; use one. Suggestion: omit 'also' or 'at the same time' to make the sentence concise.

× I prefer views from other countries because I'm so used to the views of our own country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I'm so used to the views of my own country.

Errors: preposition and pronoun choice. 'Views from other countries' is acceptable but 'views in other countries' is more idiomatic here. 'The views of our own country' uses 'our' which is ambiguous; use 'my own country' for a personal preference. Suggestion: prefer 'in' for locations experienced within a country and use consistent first-person reference.

× That's why I prefer other countries for new experience and also I want to explore the view of other countries.

✓ That's why I prefer other countries for new experiences, and I also want to explore the views in those countries.

Errors: singular/plural and repetition. 'New experience' should be plural 'new experiences' to match general preference. 'Explore the view of other countries' is awkward and repetitive; use 'explore the views in those countries.' Suggestion: use plural forms for general statements and avoid repeating the same phrase; combine clauses with a comma and 'and' for clarity.