Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn cần trả lời trực tiếp vào câu hỏi bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp căn bản (thì, động từ chia), dùng từ vựng phù hợp (e.g. "landscapes", "waterfalls") và nối ý mạch lạc bằng liên từ (e.g. "because", "for example"). Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu và tránh lặp từ như "beautiful" nhiều lần.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different landscapes because I love capturing natural beauty. For example, I often photograph quiet waterfalls and forests when I travel, since their colors and textures create peaceful images.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng là ưa thích vùng đô thị hay nông thôn (câu chủ đề), giải thích lý do với chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "I prefer" chứ không phải "I don't know open areas"), tránh câu ngắn lặp không rõ nghĩa như "Be quiet."

例: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and scenic. For instance, the quiet countryside and open fields help me relax, unlike noisy city streets.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp: nêu rõ thích trong hay ngoài nước, giải thích lý do với một ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và sửa cấu trúc như "I like views around the world" hoặc "I prefer views in other countries because...". Dùng từ vựng chính xác như "scenery", "travel" và giữ độ dài hợp lý.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering different landscapes and cultures. For example, I would love to travel with my family to see coastal cliffs in Europe and mountain scenery in Asia.

× That piggled east help me replicate and I can taking many photo and it is beautiful quiet waterfall and a few very beautiful.

✓ That place helped me relax and I could take many photos of a beautiful, quiet waterfall and some other very beautiful views.

Original sentence has multiple grammar issues: 'piggled east' seems to be a word choice/typo — corrected to 'that place'. 'help me replicate' is incorrect; likely meant 'help me relax' so use base verb after 'help'. 'I can taking' uses incorrect verb form after modal/auxiliary; use 'could take' or 'can take' and the base form 'take'. 'many photo' needs plural 'photos' (singular/plural error). Run-on structure and unclear references fixed by splitting into clear phrases and adding commas. Suggestions: use clear vocabulary ('place' not 'piggled east'), use 'help' + base verb, use correct form after modal verbs, make nouns plural when required, and separate ideas with commas or conjunctions.

× I don't know open areas. I think the view is very beautiful and many peaceful. Be quiet. Be quiet as time at the neighborhood.

✓ I prefer open areas. I think the views are very beautiful and peaceful. It is quiet most of the time in the neighborhood.

Errors: 'I don't know open areas' is incorrect collocation; correct phrase is 'I prefer open areas' or 'I like open areas' (verb choice). 'many peaceful' incorrectly uses 'many' with an adjective; should say 'very peaceful' or 'peaceful' (quantifier/adjective misuse). Repeated 'Be quiet' is an imperative but context needs description: use 'It is quiet'. 'As time' is wrong preposition/phrase; correct idiom is 'most of the time'. Also 'view' should be plural if referring generally. Suggestions: choose appropriate verbs ('prefer'/'like'), use 'very' with adjectives, use 'It is quiet' to describe environment, and use 'most of the time' for frequency.

× I'd like the view in the world because I see many view is beautiful beautiful and I want to try travel with my family and I can travel the view in the world.

✓ I'd like to see views around the world because I think many views are very beautiful, and I want to travel with my family to see them.

Problems: 'I'd like the view in the world' is awkward; use 'see views around the world' for general preference. 'I see many view is beautiful beautiful' mixes tenses and singular/plural; correct to 'I think many views are very beautiful' (present simple for general belief and correct plural noun agreement). 'I want to try travel' is incorrect verb pattern; use 'I want to travel' or 'try to travel'. 'I can travel the view in the world' is awkward and redundant; better 'travel with my family to see them.' Suggestions: use present simple for general statements ('I think'), ensure subject-verb agreement and plural nouns, use correct verb patterns after 'want', and avoid redundant phrases.