Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 반복되고 시제와 어법에 잘못된 부분이 있습니다. 먼저 주제문으로 직접적으로 답하고, 추가 설명에서는 반복을 줄이며 시제와 관사, 동사의 형태를 바로잡아 자연스럽게 말하세요. 예를 들어 'I enjoy taking photos of different views.'로 시작하고 이유와 구체적 예시를 한두 문장으로 연결사로 묶어 말하세요. 또한 ‘when I travel’처럼 동사원형을 사용하고 과거 경험은 ‘I took’ 대신 ‘I take’ 또는 ‘I usually take’처럼 규칙을 유지하세요.

例: I enjoy taking photos of different views because I often share them on Instagram. When I travel with friends or family, I usually take many pictures of landmarks, landscapes and local people to remember the trip.

提案: 문장이 장황하고 중복 표현이 많습니다. 간단한 주제문 뒤에 구체적 이유를 하나나두개만 제시하고, 형용사의 비교·정확한 위치를 사용하세요. 예를 들어 ‘rural areas are quieter and more scenic’처럼 핵심을 먼저 말한 뒤, ‘because’로 구체적 이유를 덧붙이세요. 또한 ‘prettier’와 같은 비교급은 비교 대상이 있을 때 사용하므로 단순 긍정 표현이나 ‘more beautiful’로 정리하세요.

例: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and more scenic. The forests, open fields and warm sunlight create more beautiful photo opportunities than crowded city streets.

提案: 지엽적인 명사 사용과 관사 사용 오류(예: 'a Singapore')가 있습니다. 먼저 직접적으로 답하고, 이유와 구체적 예시를 연결사로 매끄럽게 연결하세요. 장소 이름과 명칭은 정확하게 말하고, 과거 경험을 말할 때는 시제를 일관되게 사용하세요. 예: 'I prefer views abroad because I enjoy exploring different cultures; for example, when I visited Singapore, I saw landmarks like Merlion Park and beautiful green spaces.'

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy exploring different cultures and landscapes. For example, when I visited Singapore, I admired places like the Merlion and the city's well-maintained parks and nature reserves.

× So when I go when I go travel with my friends or family, I took a lot of pictures in different views, landmarks or people.

✓ So when I travel with my friends or family, I take a lot of pictures of different views, landmarks, and people.

The original sentence repeats 'when I go' and mixes present and past tense ('travel' with 'took'), causing tense inconsistency and a sentence structure error. Use present simple 'travel' with present simple 'take' to match the habitual action. Also change 'in different views' to 'of different views' and use parallel conjunction 'and' for the list. Suggestions: remove repetition, keep consistent tense for habitual actions, use correct preposition 'of' for taking pictures.

× I prefer views in rural areas because in rural areas there is a lot of forests, trees and sunshine and it makes pictures more make pictures and photos more prettier and more nice.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because there are a lot of forests, trees, and sunshine, which make photos prettier.

Errors include incorrect use of 'there is' with a plural noun (should be 'there are'), redundant phrase 'make pictures more make pictures', and awkward comparative 'more prettier and more nice.' Also use a relative clause 'which make photos prettier' for clarity. Suggestions: use 'there are' for plural subjects, avoid redundant words, use correct comparative forms (prettier) and more concise phrasing.

× When I visited a Singapore there is a lot of pretty views such as Morayan statue and some forests and parks.

✓ When I visited Singapore, there were a lot of pretty views such as the Merlion statue and some forests and parks.

Using 'a Singapore' is incorrect; country names do not take an article. Tense inconsistency: 'When I visited' requires past tense 'there were' not 'there is.' 'Morayan statue' appears to be a misspelling of 'Merlion statue' and needs the definite article 'the' before a specific landmark. Suggestions: omit article before country names, match past tense verbs, use 'there were' for plural past existence, and use 'the' for specific landmarks.

× So I like other countries views.

✓ So I like views in other countries.

The phrase 'other countries views' lacks the preposition 'in' and should use the noun phrase 'views in other countries.' Without 'in' it incorrectly attaches plural possessive meaning; adding 'in' clarifies location. Suggestions: use correct preposition to link nouns and avoid incorrect noun-noun stacking.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I like uploading pictures on Instagram.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I like uploading pictures to Instagram.

Preposition with 'uploading' should be 'to Instagram' not 'on Instagram.' The rest is grammatically acceptable. Suggestion: use 'upload to' when referring to transferring content onto a platform.