Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp cơ bản, giảm sử dụng tiếng lắp và từ thừa, trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề ngắn gọn rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể. Cần dùng thì đúng (ví dụ: 'if I take pictures'), nối các ý bằng từ nối hợp lý (because, so, and), và nêu cụ thể: ví dụ nơi chụp, cảm xúc khi chụp, mục đích chụp.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me relax and sparks my creativity. For example, when I photograph city skylines or coastal landscapes, I notice details I would otherwise miss, and I can share these images with friends. So taking photos is both a hobby and a way to record my travels.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp (ví dụ 'in view in urban area', 'big beautiful picture'). Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer urban views) và giải thích lý do cụ thể, kèm ví dụ và từ nối (because, for example). Hạn chế tiếng ấp úng và nói ngắn gọn dưới 5 câu.

例: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse architecture and lively scenes. For example, I enjoy photographing modern skyscrapers and busy streets, which provide interesting contrasts of light and movement. Also, friendly locals often help me find good spots or take photos for me.

提案: Trả lời chưa rõ ràng và lặp ý, ngữ pháp sai (ví dụ 'one country have', 'when I travel to country'). Cần nói trực tiếp (I prefer views in other countries) rồi nêu lý do cụ thể: sự đa dạng, văn hóa khác nhau, ví dụ cụ thể về một nơi và cảm nhận. Dùng câu ngắn, cấu trúc đúng và từ vựng phù hợp (diversity, culture, unique landscapes).

例: I prefer views in other countries because each place offers unique landscapes and cultural experiences. For instance, photographing ancient temples in Japan taught me about local traditions and produced very different images compared with beaches at home. Traveling abroad broadens my perspective and inspires new photographic ideas.

× Yes, I like uh, because, uh, if I taking picture of different views, I can go another place and travel a lot of uh, place I can go to around the world, uh, to inspire and have a lot of experience as it help me relax.

✓ Yes, I like it because if I take pictures of different views, I can go to other places and travel to many places around the world, which inspires me and gives me a lot of experience because it helps me relax.

The sentence uses 'I taking' which is incorrect; after 'if' we need the base form 'take' (conditional present). Also use plural 'pictures' for countable objects. Use correct prepositions: 'go to other places' and 'travel to many places'. Use a relative clause 'which inspires me' and 'gives me a lot of experience' with 'helps me relax'. Suggestions: use 'if I take' for conditional, use plural nouns for multiple items, and restructure run-on clauses into shorter, clearer clauses. Note: This correction targets the verb + -ing form issue where 'taking' was incorrectly used instead of base form.

× Uh, I like, I prefer in view in urban area because it's very simple.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because they are very simple.

The original uses incorrect prepositions and singular/plural mismatch: 'prefer in view in urban area' is ungrammatical. Use 'prefer views in urban areas'. Also match plurality: 'views' and 'areas'. Suggestions: place 'prefer' before the object ('I prefer views in urban areas') and pluralize when referring generally. Note: This correction focuses on preposition placement and noun number.

× Uh, people in this very friendly. They can help me taking, uh, lots of, uh, big beautiful picture.

✓ The people here are very friendly. They can help me take many big, beautiful pictures.

'People' requires a plural verb: use 'are'. 'In this' is unclear; 'here' suits the context. 'Help me taking' is wrong; after 'help' we use the base verb 'take'. 'Lots of big beautiful picture' needs plural 'pictures' and use 'many' or 'lots of' correctly. Also add commas between adjectives: 'big, beautiful'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, use base form after 'help', and pluralize countable nouns.

× Umm, I prefer to view in other country because one country have, uh, one view, the the most different, the most different and beautiful.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because each country has different and beautiful scenery.

Original mixes singular and plural inconsistently: 'view in other country' should be 'views in other countries'. 'One country have' is incorrect; use 'each country has'. 'One view' and repetition is confusing; use 'different and beautiful scenery'. Suggestions: keep number consistent (plural when speaking generally), use 'each' or 'every' with singular countable nouns and match verb 'has'.

× Umm, when I travel to country, I have experience, a different experience and I go to a lot of country and have a lot.

✓ When I travel to other countries, I gain different experiences and visit many countries, which gives me a lot.

Sentence is fragmented and repetitive. 'Travel to country' needs 'other countries'. 'I have experience, a different experience' is redundant; 'gain different experiences' is clearer. 'I go to a lot of country' should be 'visit many countries'. The ending 'have a lot' is incomplete; clarify what 'a lot' refers to (e.g., 'a lot of experience'). Suggestions: combine related ideas, avoid repetition, and complete thoughts by specifying objects (e.g., 'a lot of experience').