Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but can be more natural and expanded briefly with a supporting reason. Avoid absolute phrasing like "I don't like" if you sometimes do. Use linking words to connect your main idea and reason, and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: I usually don't take many photos of views because I prefer to enjoy the moment with my own eyes. However, sometimes I take a quick picture to remember a special scene, for example when the light or colors are unusual.

提案: Your answer attempts to state a preference but has contradictions and unclear vocabulary. "More abundant" needs specification (what is abundant?) and calling the atmosphere "quite dangerous" is odd when explaining a preference. Use linking words and give specific reasons (e.g., architecture, nightlife, accessibility). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because there is more variety in architecture and street life, such as tall buildings, parks and cafés. Also, cities are easier to explore on foot or by public transport, which makes sightseeing more convenient.

提案: The sentiment is positive but the phrasing is vague and somewhat informal. Explain specifically what makes your country's views special (landscapes, culture, familiarity) and use a linking word to expand the idea. Avoid metaphors that are unclear in exam context unless you immediately clarify them.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel very familiar with the landscapes and culture; for example, our coastal scenery and historic towns are both beautiful and easy to visit. In addition, being close to family makes trips at home more relaxing.

× I don't like taking pictures of different views because I want to enjoy the moment with my own bare eyes.

✓ I don't like taking pictures of different views because I want to enjoy the moment with my bare eyes.

The phrase 'my own bare eyes' uses redundant possessive structure; 'my bare eyes' is the natural collocation in English. This is a pronoun/possessive usage issue. Suggestion: use 'my bare eyes' to convey possession without 'own'. Also consider simply 'with my eyes' for a more natural phrasing.

× I believe I prefer views in urban areas because it's more abundant and the atmosphere in there is quite dangerous.

✓ I believe I prefer views in urban areas because they are more abundant and the atmosphere there is quite dangerous.

The original sentence uses 'it's' (it is) to refer to 'views in urban areas' (plural) and 'more abundant' without matching plural subject; this is a subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference issue. Replace 'it's' with 'they are' to match plural 'views'. Also 'in there' is awkward; use 'there' after 'atmosphere' or 'the atmosphere there' for correct prepositional use. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches the noun and use 'there' instead of 'in there'.

× I prefer views in my own country because we have a country just like in heaven.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because our country is like heaven.

The phrase 'we have a country just like in heaven' is unnatural and misuses 'we have' when referring to the country itself; this is a pronoun/reference and sentence structure issue. More natural phrasing is 'our country is like heaven' or 'it is like heaven'. Suggestion: refer to the country with 'our country' or 'it' and avoid 'in heaven' when comparing; use 'like heaven' for simile.