Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid fillers like 'uh' and repeating phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details (what you photograph, how often, and why). Keep the response within 3–4 sentences and use linking words to improve flow.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I often photograph cityscapes and natural scenes, especially when I travel, and I post my best shots on Instagram. Because photography relaxes me and helps me remember places, I try to take photos a few times a week.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first (e.g., 'I prefer rural/nature views'), then provide specific supporting details and use linking words. Avoid repetition and vague phrases; correct minor grammar (e.g., 'phases of the moon'). Limit to 3–4 sentences and include an example or brief reason.

例: I prefer rural and natural views rather than urban scenes. For example, I like photographing sunrises, sunsets, and the different phases of the moon because they create dramatic lighting. As a result, I often visit parks or coastal areas at dawn to capture those moments.

提案: Answer directly and avoid hesitation words like 'yeah' and 'you know.' State your preference clearly, then add a reason and a concise example of what you would like to photograph abroad. Use linking words to make it coherent and correct phrasing ('the good side of other countries').

例: I mainly prefer photographing views in my own country because I know the best locations and seasons. However, I would also love to visit other countries to capture different landscapes and cultural scenes, such as mountain ranges in Switzerland or coastal towns in Greece, to broaden my portfolio.

× Yes, uh, nowadays I do take pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, nowadays I take pictures of different views.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for a simple present affirmative sentence. Use the simple present 'take' to describe habitual actions. Suggestion: remove 'do' unless forming a question or adding emphasis.

× Earlier I was not someone who would take out my phone and take pictures, but these days I'm loving it.

✓ Earlier I was not someone who would take out my phone and take pictures, but these days I love it.

'I'm loving' is the present continuous; with stative verbs like 'love' the simple present 'love' is preferred to describe feelings. Use 'love' to express a general current preference.

× I frequently take photos posted on Instagram and I'm loving it.

✓ I frequently post photos on Instagram and I love it.

'Take photos posted on Instagram' is incorrect word order and meaning. Use the verb 'post' for uploading and the simple present 'love' for preference. Also avoid continuous 'I'm loving' for stative verbs.

× More than urban or rural areas, I really, really love to capture moments of nature, maybe some sunsets, sunrise, because that makes me feel very happy.

✓ Rather than urban or rural areas, I really love to capture moments of nature, such as sunsets and sunrises, because that makes me feel very happy.

'More than urban or rural areas' is awkward; use 'rather than'. 'Maybe some sunsets, sunrise' lacks parallel form and articles; use 'such as sunsets and sunrises'. This improves clarity and grammatical parallelism.

× I love to capture moon phases of moon.

✓ I love to capture the phases of the moon.

'Moon phases of moon' is redundant and lacks correct article placement. Use 'the phases of the moon' to refer to specific phases; 'the' is required for definite noun phrases.

× So yeah, I'm more into nature photography rather than taking perfect photo friendly views of.

✓ So yeah, I'm more into nature photography rather than taking perfectly photogenic views.

'Perfect photo friendly views of' is ungrammatical and incomplete. Use the adjective 'photogenic' and adverb 'perfectly' for correct modification, and remove the trailing preposition.

× Yeah, yeah, obviously I love taking photos of views in my own country, but I would really, really love to, you know, visit some country, take pictures or there enjoy the view and maybe see other side of good side of the other country.

✓ I love taking photos of views in my own country, but I would really love to visit another country, take pictures there, enjoy the views, and see the good side of that country.

Sentence had several issues: 'some country' should be 'another country' or 'a foreign country'; 'or there enjoy the view' is ungrammatical — reorder to 'take pictures there, enjoy the views'; 'see other side of good side of the other country' is redundant and unclear — use 'see the good side of that country'. Use parallel structure in the list and simple present/future intention phrasing.