Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct grammar (e.g., 'I like taking pictures' not 'I like to taking'), and give one or two specific reasons with brief supporting details. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. I often take photos at picnics, tourist sites, and family events because photos help me remember special moments. For example, at my cousin’s wedding I took landscape shots of the venue to capture the atmosphere.

提案: Use a clear comparative statement and avoid repetition. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'greenery', 'picnic spots'). Provide one specific reason and an example, linking with words like 'because' and 'for example'. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer rural views because they have more natural scenery and fresh air. For example, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and green fields at nearby picnic spots, which are rare in the city.

提案: Give a direct answer and support it with specific, well-formed examples. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I prefer views in other countries' and country names: 'Saudi Arabia') and use linking words such as 'for example' or 'such as'. Avoid vague phrases like 'they got views also.'

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often have landscapes I can’t find at home. For example, Switzerland has stunning green valleys, while countries like the UAE offer dramatic desert and modern skyline scenes.

× I like to taking pictures because I can recap.

✓ I like taking pictures because I can recap them.

The verb following 'like' can be either the infinitive (to take) or the gerund (taking), but not 'to' plus gerund. Replace 'to taking' with 'taking'. Also add an object 'them' after 'recap' to clarify what is being recapped.

× I will prefer views in rural areas because I think rural areas are more attractive than urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I think rural areas are more attractive than urban areas.

The modal 'will' is not needed for habitual preferences; use the simple present 'prefer' to express general preference. 'Will prefer' would suggest a future or conditional meaning, which doesn't fit the question about general preference.

× There are some greeneries in you can see some greenery places like hills, picnic sports or that type of uh sport in the rural areas which I can't see in urban.

✓ You can see greenery in rural areas, such as hills, picnic spots and similar places, which I can't see in urban areas.

Original sentence mixes clauses and misuses prepositions and nouns ('greeneries', 'picnic sports'). 'Greenery' is uncountable, so use 'greenery' or 'green areas'. 'Picnic spots' is correct, not 'picnic sports'. Reorder the sentence to place the subject and verb properly and add 'areas' after 'urban' for clarity.

× I will prefer views in other countries like there are many kind of countries have lots of views like Switzerland they got greenery seen in the Middle East country like Saudi Arab or UAE they got some views also.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because many countries have beautiful scenery. For example, Switzerland has a lot of greenery, and some Middle Eastern countries such as Saudi Arabia and the UAE also have interesting views.

Again, 'will prefer' is inappropriate for a general preference; use 'prefer'. The original sentence contains run-on structure, incorrect noun forms ('kind of countries'), informal 'they got', and incorrect country names ('Saudi Arab'). Split into clearer sentences, use correct country names and proper verb forms ('has' instead of 'got'), and replace 'many kind of countries' with 'many countries' or 'many kinds of countries' depending on meaning.