Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatically correct, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct common errors: use 'I'm really into taking photos of different views' and explain why (e.g. emotions, memories, aesthetics). Avoid fillers and repetition.

例: Yes, I am really into taking photos of different views because they often evoke strong emotions and help me remember places. For example, I love photographing sunsets at the beach since the colours and light make the scene memorable.

提案: Answer directly (urban or rural) and give a specific reason with linking words. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'urban areas', 'rural areas', 'convenience') and avoid unclear words. Keep to two to three sentences and explain when you prefer each.

例: It depends on my mood, but I usually prefer urban views because cities offer interesting architecture and convenient facilities. However, when I want peace and wide open spaces, I prefer rural views for their tranquillity and natural scenery.

提案: Give a direct answer and then support it with a specific reason and an example. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g. 'I prefer views in other countries' and 'Switzerland is the place I would most like to visit'). Avoid hesitations and unclear words like 'pay'.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new landscapes and cultures that I haven't experienced. For instance, Switzerland's mountains and lakes fascinate me, and I would love to photograph its alpine scenery.

× I really into take photo with different view because different view is make me feel. Difference. MMM.

✓ I'm really into taking photos of different views because different views make me feel different.

Errors: missing auxiliary 'am' for 'I'm', incorrect use of base verb 'take' instead of gerund 'taking' after 'into', 'photo' should be plural 'photos' to match 'different views', 'with' is wrong preposition—use 'of', 'is make me feel. Difference.' is ungrammatical; use 'make me feel different'. Suggestion: use 'be' + 'into' + gerund, ensure noun plurality matches 'different', and use correct subject-verb agreement with plural subject 'views' + verb 'make'.

× It depends on my feeling because sometime I really prefer open more than rural area because Oban keep every convince.

✓ It depends on my mood because sometimes I prefer urban areas to rural areas since urban areas are more convenient.

Errors: 'feeling' is awkward; 'mood' is better. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb). 'prefer open more than rural area' is unclear—likely 'prefer urban areas to rural areas' (use comparative structure 'prefer X to Y'). 'Oban keep every convince' seems garbled; likely intended 'urban areas are more convenient'—use correct subject-verb agreement and adjective 'convenient'. Suggestion: use 'prefer X to Y', pluralize areas, use correct adverb 'sometimes' and clear vocabulary 'mood'/'convenient'.

× MMM, I would say I prefer view in another country. I love the view in Switzerland. It's the pay that I would like to go the most.

✓ I would say I prefer views in other countries. I love the views in Switzerland. It's the place that I would most like to visit.

Errors: 'view' should be plural 'views' and 'in another country' better as 'in other countries' to match general preference. 'the view in Switzerland' → 'the views in Switzerland' for consistency. 'It's the pay' is incorrect—should be 'place'. Word order 'I would like to go the most' is awkward; use 'that I would most like to visit'. Suggestion: pluralize where general preference is expressed, use correct noun 'place', and use natural word order 'most like to visit'.