Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ tự nhiên bằng cách sửa lỗi cơ bản (ví dụ: "It's make" -> "It makes"), rút gọn câu dài/đệm không cần thiết, và giữ câu trả lời trong tối đa 4-5 câu. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về loại cảnh bạn thích chụp và một ví dụ ngắn để làm câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Dùng các liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (for example, because, so).

例: Yes, I do. I usually take photos of different views about once a week when I have free time, or about once a month when I’m busy. It makes me feel happy and inspired to capture beautiful scenes, especially sunsets and rivers. For example, last weekend I took photos of a sunset by the river near my house.

提案: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng (ví dụ: "a rural areas" -> "rural areas" hoặc "the countryside"; tránh từ không chuẩn như "waterful" và cụm "ring for me"). Trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu 1-2 lý do rõ ràng, dùng liên từ (because, for example) và tránh tiếng lắp. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về khung cảnh yêu thích để tăng tính thuyết phục.

例: To be honest, I prefer rural areas because I grew up in a village in northeast Vietnam. I like the peaceful atmosphere and the rivers and rice fields there, which are very relaxing. For example, I enjoy taking photos of farmers working in the fields at sunrise.

提案: Chú ý phát âm và dùng từ chính xác ("a lot of wine" có lẽ là nhầm cho "a lot of varied" hoặc "variety"; sửa ngữ pháp như "my country also have" -> "my country also has"). Bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời rõ ràng, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và ví dụ, hạn chế tiếng lấp và từ thừa. Kết thúc bằng một câu tổng kết ngắn.

例: Definitely. I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam offers a wide variety of landscapes. For example, I love the beaches in Da Nang and the mountains in Sapa, and there are also many modern cities to explore. This mix makes traveling around Vietnam very exciting.

× Yes I do, I usually take photos of different views about once a week when I'm free or about once a month when I'm busy.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually take photos of different views about once a week when I'm free, or about once a month when I'm busy.

The sentence needs comma and sentence segmentation to follow spoken English rhythm; the present simple 'usually take' is correct. Add a comma after 'Yes' and split into two clauses with a comma before 'or' for clarity.

× It's make me feel very happy and inspired to capture beauty scenes.

✓ It makes me feel very happy and inspired to capture beautiful scenes.

The subject 'It' requires the verb in third person singular form 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). Also use the adjective 'beautiful' instead of the noun 'beauty' to modify 'scenes'.

× Umm, to be honest, I'm a girl from the northeast of Vietnam, so I think I'm, I choose a rural areas because I love my village.

✓ Umm, to be honest, I'm a girl from the northeast of Vietnam, so I choose rural areas because I love my village.

Remove the extra 'I'm' which is redundant. Also use plural 'areas' without the article 'a' when referring generally to 'rural areas'.

× I love the peaceful and the waterful things that my village ring for me.

✓ I love the peaceful atmosphere and the watery scenes that my village brings me.

'Peaceful' should modify a noun like 'atmosphere'. 'Waterful' is not a standard adjective; use 'watery' or 'water-filled'. 'Ring' is incorrect verb; use 'brings'. This corrects word choice and collocation.

× So umm and I also love the views.

✓ So, umm, I also love the views.

Small punctuation and filler placement: insert commas for natural spoken pauses. Present simple 'love' is correct.

× Oh, definitely. I prefer the views in my country, Vietnam, because it has a lot of wine, variety of landscape.

✓ Oh, definitely. I prefer the views in my country, Vietnam, because it has a lot of wine and a variety of landscapes.

Add conjunction 'and' between items and use 'a variety of landscapes' (countable plural) rather than 'variety of landscape'. 'Wine' likely intended 'wine regions' or 'vineyards' but if 'wine' kept, pluralize 'landscapes'.

× For example, I love the beach in Danang and I also love the mountains in Sapa.

✓ For example, I love the beaches in Danang, and I also love the mountains in Sapa.

Use plural 'beaches' if referring generally, and add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. Sentence structure improved for clarity.

× And you know, uh, my country also have a lot of modern cities.

✓ And you know, uh, my country also has a lot of modern cities.

Subject 'my country' is singular, so the verb must be third person singular 'has' (subject-verb agreement).

× Wonderful.

✓ It's wonderful.

As a standalone comment, 'Wonderful' is acceptable in speech, but grammatically a complete sentence needs a verb: 'It's wonderful.' This makes it a full utterance.