Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer communicates the main idea but has issues with word choice, redundancy and sentence clarity. Use a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating similar phrases ("remember my memories"), and choose correct vocabulary (e.g., "create lasting records" instead of "proliferate recordings"). Keep the answer concise (1–3 sentences) and natural.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because photos create lasting records that help me remember important moments. For example, when I travel I take landscape and street photos to capture the atmosphere and details I might later forget.

提案: Good direct reply with a clear preference. Improve by using more natural collocations (e.g., "rural areas" is fine, but use "natural scenery" or "original landscapes" instead of "indigenous area"), and add a brief specific reason or example using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "for example"). Limit to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

例: I prefer rural areas because the natural scenery and peaceful atmosphere are more captivating to me. For example, I love photographing old farms and rolling hills where you can capture textures and light that you don't see in cities.

提案: The answer shows enthusiasm but has problems with grammar, phrasing and hesitations. Use a single clear sentence stating preference, then add one specific reason with linking words. Avoid filler words ("uh") and incorrect expressions ("explore all the country of myself").

例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad lets me discover new landscapes and cultures. For instance, visiting coastal villages in Spain allowed me to photograph architecture and light that I had never seen at home.

× I would like to take pictures from different views because capturing the moment in a photo can make a proliferate recordings for me to remember my memories and the moments in my life.

✓ I would like to take pictures from different views because capturing a moment in a photo can create lasting records for me to remember the events in my life.

The original sentence has several issues: 'proliferate recordings' is incorrect word choice and form; 'make' with 'recordings' is awkward. Use 'create lasting records' where 'create' is a verb and 'lasting records' is a correct noun phrase. Also change 'capturing the moment' to 'capturing a moment' for naturalness. Use singular/plural appropriately ('records' matches 'lasting' as plural). Suggestion: use common collocations like 'capture a moment' and 'lasting records' or 'lasting memories.'

× Honestly, I would prefer the rural areas because the indigenous area and original sceneries in those areas are captivating to me.

✓ Honestly, I prefer rural areas because the local landscape and natural scenery there are captivating to me.

Errors include incorrect adjective usage: 'the rural areas' is acceptible but 'the indigenous area and original sceneries' is unnatural. 'Indigenous' typically describes people or species; use 'local' or 'native' for areas. 'Original sceneries' is not idiomatic; use 'natural scenery' or 'landscapes.' Also simplify 'I would prefer the rural areas' to 'I prefer rural areas' to match the general preference question. Suggestion: choose idiomatic collocations such as 'local landscape' and 'natural scenery.'

× Absolutely. I prefer the foreign countries because I explore all the country of myself.

✓ Absolutely. I prefer foreign countries because I like to explore different countries by myself.

Problems: 'the foreign countries' is unnaturally specific; 'foreign countries' without 'the' is better. 'I explore all the country of myself' is grammatically incorrect and unidiomatic: 'all the country' is wrong number/form and 'of myself' is incorrect pronoun use. Use 'by myself' for doing something alone, and 'different countries' for the intended meaning. Suggestion: use 'by myself' for solo activities and 'different countries' to express variety.

× So the foreign countries are most vast and uh, they have more, uh, new and unknown, uh, spaces and sceneries to me.

✓ Foreign countries are generally more vast, and they offer many new and unfamiliar places and sceneries to me.

The original has awkward structure and filler words ('uh'), incorrect modifier order ('most vast' is grammatical but odd; 'more vast' or 'more extensive' is preferable), and 'unknown spaces and sceneries to me' is unidiomatic. Rephrase to 'offer many new and unfamiliar places and sceneries' for clarity. Suggestion: remove fillers, use natural comparative forms ('more vast' or 'more expansive'), and choose idiomatic nouns like 'places' and 'scenery.'