Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases like “when it's running.” Use linking words if you add a second idea. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “scenes,” “angles,” “landscapes”) and correct small grammar issues (use singular/plural consistently).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I like experimenting with camera angles and framing to capture landscapes and cityscapes, because changing the angle often highlights interesting details.

提案: Give a full sentence as a clear topic sentence and add a specific reason with one detail using a linking word. Expand slightly to make your opinion convincing and natural.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they feel more peaceful and offer natural scenery, such as rolling hills and open fields, which I find more inspiring for photography.

提案: Make the response grammatically complete and add one specific reason or example with a linking word. Replace vague phrases with concrete details (e.g., unique architecture, different cultures).

例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling lets me see different landscapes and architecture, for instance colorful markets or historic buildings, which makes me feel like I’m exploring new cultures.

× I love taking pictures when it's running so you can bring the beauty of the pictures.

✓ I love taking pictures when things are moving so I can capture their beauty.

The original sentence used 'it's running' which is awkward and ungrammatical because 'it' lacks a clear referent and 'running' as present participle here is inappropriate. Replace with 'things are moving' to clearly refer to moving scenes, and use 'capture' instead of 'bring' because 'capture the beauty' is the correct collocation for photography. Also change 'you can' to 'I can' to match the speaker and maintain coherence.

× I prefer rural areas view.

✓ I prefer rural views.

The phrase 'rural areas view' is incorrect: 'view' should be plural ('views') to match the general preference, and the noun 'areas' is unnecessary. Alternatively, 'views in rural areas' would work. This fixes article/number and word-order issues and produces a natural phrase.

× I prefer views in other country because it feels like I am exploring around the world.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because it feels like I am exploring the world.

'Other country' is singular but should be plural ('other countries') when speaking generally. Also 'exploring around the world' is redundant; use 'exploring the world'. These changes fix number agreement and make the sentence more natural.