Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、繰り返しやためらい語（umm, uh）、文のまとまりの欠如が目立ちます。まずは短く明確な主文を述べ、その後で理由を一つだけ具体的に付け加えてください。接続詞（because, so）を使って論理的につなぎ、不要な反復を避けましょう。発音の自信を高めるために文をゆっくりはっきり話す練習も必要です。

例: No, I don't usually take photos of views. I prefer to enjoy the scenery with my own eyes because taking pictures can distract me from the moment.

提案: 答えは都市部を好むと伝えていますが、繰り返しや支援の内容が曖昧です。明確なトピック文（I prefer urban views）を最初に置き、次に理由を2つ程度、具体的に示してください。接続語（for example, because, however）を使い分けて論理を整理すると説得力が増します。語彙はsimpleでも問題ないので、表現を整えて滑らかに話す練習をしましょう。

例: I prefer urban views. For example, I enjoy the city lights and skyline at night because they look impressive from high places, and there are many interesting buildings to notice.

提案: 意味は伝わりますが文法の誤りや混乱した語順、繰り返しが見られます。まず主張（I prefer views in other countries）をはっきり述べ、その後で理由を時系列や具体例で整理して話してください。過去形や現在形を正しく使い、代名詞の使い方に注意しましょう。接続詞（because, for example）で理由を示すと分かりやすくなります。

例: I prefer views in other countries because I find foreign cities more exciting. For example, my father traveled to Hong Kong and Shanghai for work and showed me photos of the skyline, which looked really beautiful and inspired me.

× No, I don't uh, I like, indeed I like umm pictures, but I wanna, I want to uh, I want to look watch uh, through my eye only eye. So, so I don't.

✓ No, I don't. I do like pictures, but I want to look with my own eyes, so I don't take photos.

Student uses many fillers (uh, umm), inconsistent contractions (wanna vs I want) and incorrect phrase 'look watch through my eye only eye'. These are issues of sentence structure and word choice. Suggestion: remove fillers, use standard forms ('want to' not 'wanna') and correct phrasing: 'look with my own eyes' or 'see with my own eyes'. Keep sentences concise and use appropriate punctuation. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Actually, I prefer, I prefer, uh, urban areas. Uh, yes, I've also, I feel and that, and feeling nature is good. Uh, but I like, uh, the night view, uh, from the top, top of the view.

✓ Actually, I prefer urban areas. I also like nature, but I especially like the night view from high places.

Problems: awkward phrasing 'I've also, I feel and that, and feeling nature is good' and redundant words. Use 'I also like nature' for present preference. 'From the top, top of the view' is incorrect; 'from high places' or 'from the top' is correct. Suggestion: remove fillers, combine ideas clearly and use consistent verb tense for preferences (present simple). Grammar problem type ID:6

× I prefer you another country is you because my actually my father go to, went to, went to China, Hong Kong, Shanghai in China, uh, for, for his work, uh, and he showed, he showed me the pictures. It was great, beautiful.

✓ I prefer other countries because my father went to China, including Hong Kong and Shanghai, for work, and he showed me pictures. They were very beautiful.

Errors: 'I prefer you another country is you' is ungrammatical—should be 'I prefer other countries' (pronoun and word order). Tense repetition 'go to, went to' is inconsistent; use past simple 'went'. Repeated 'he showed, he showed' is redundant; single past 'he showed me pictures' suffices. 'It was great, beautiful' should agree in number: 'They were very beautiful' referring to pictures. Suggestion: use correct pronouns ('other countries'), consistent past tense for completed actions, remove repetitions, and match subject and verb number. Grammar problem type ID:12