Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan kejelasan ide. Gunakan kalimat topik langsung, lalu jelaskan alasan secara spesifik dengan kata hubung (mis. because, so, so that). Hindari kata seperti "maybe" jika tidak pasti; gunakan alasan konkret seperti menyimpan kenangan atau berbagi foto. Batasi jawaban hingga maksimal 3–4 kalimat.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember places I've visited. For example, I photograph landscapes so I can revisit the memory later and share it with friends.

提案: Perbaiki pemilihan kata dan struktur kalimat. Mulailah dengan pernyataan langsung (I prefer...), lalu jelaskan alasan dengan detail spesifik (mis. architecture, lights, activities). Gunakan linking words sederhana seperti "because" atau "because of" dan hindari pengucapan yang tidak jelas.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy city architecture and lively street scenes. For instance, the mixture of old buildings and modern lights creates interesting photo opportunities.

提案: Buat jawaban yang lebih ringkas dan jelas. Sampaikan pilihan secara tegas (I prefer...), lalu tambahkan alasan spesifik seperti budaya, pemandangan berbeda, atau kesempatan memotret hal unik. Gunakan satu atau dua kalimat pendukung dan hindari pengulangan kata serta filler (mis. "uh").

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different cultures and landscapes to photograph. For example, I enjoy capturing unique architecture and local festivals that I can't find at home.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views because maybe I can go again.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because maybe I can go again.

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'taking' implies a habitual or repeated action and 'different views' refers to multiple items; use plural to match quantity (subject-verb/ noun agreement). Suggestion: use 'taking pictures' when referring to photographing multiple scenes.

× I prefer fuse in urban areas because I like city.

✓ I prefer places in urban areas because I like the city.

'Fuse' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation of 'places' or 'views'; replace with 'places'. Also 'city' needs the definite article 'the city' when speaking generally about urban environments. Suggestion: use 'the city' to refer to urban areas and ensure correct noun choice ('places' or 'views').

× I prefer fuse in other countries. And I can get, uh, taking picture in other countries.

✓ I prefer places in other countries. And I can take pictures in other countries.

Again, 'fuse' should be 'places'. 'Taking picture' is ungrammatical here; the correct verb form is 'take pictures' for the action. Use plural 'pictures' to match multiple photos and use the base verb 'take' rather than 'getting taking'. Suggestion: say 'take pictures' and use plural nouns when referring to multiple photos.