Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và trật tự từ, tránh lặp lại và nói lắp; trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại cảnh, cảm xúc, khi nào bạn chụp). Sử dụng từ nối nếu thêm thông tin.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes because natural landscapes help me relax and clear my mind. For example, I often shoot at sunrise in nearby parks, which gives me peaceful colors and quiet moments. I also like taking pictures of animals because they add life and unpredictability to my photos.

提案: Làm rõ câu chủ đề và tránh từ không chính xác; sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ: 'convenience' not 'con convenience'), và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do bạn thích cảnh đô thị (ví dụ: ánh sáng, kiến trúc, hoạt động). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, sử dụng liên từ để nối ý.

例: I prefer urban views because I grew up in the city and feel connected to its atmosphere. Cityscapes offer interesting architecture, vibrant street life, and convenient locations for photography. For instance, I enjoy capturing night lights and busy markets because they create dynamic compositions.

提案: Giảm nói hàm hồ và lặp từ (uh, um); phát biểu rõ ràng và cụ thể lý do muốn chụp ở nước ngoài (ví dụ: phong cách kiến trúc khác, nền văn hóa, cơ hội giao tiếp). Sử dụng cấu trúc nối để giải thích nguyên nhân và ví dụ minh họa.

例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because I want to explore different architectures and cultures. Traveling abroad gives me opportunities to meet local people and learn new perspectives, which often leads to more interesting photos. For example, I would love to capture traditional markets and historic buildings in Europe or Asia.

× Yes, I really enjoy taking photos in different view because photography natural scenery help me feel relaxed and focus on.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of different views because photographing natural scenery helps me feel relaxed and focused.

Original sentence uses incorrect prepositions and word forms: 'in different view' should be 'of different views' (preposition and plural). 'photography natural scenery' is incorrect word order and form; use the gerund/verb 'photographing'. 'help me feel relaxed and focus on' has subject-verb agreement and word form errors: 'helps' for singular subject and 'focused' as the correct adjective. Suggestion: use 'of' for what you take photos of, pluralize 'views', use 'photographing' or 'taking photos of', ensure subject-verb agreement and correct adjective forms.

× Especially I really love take a picture with animal.

✓ Especially I really love taking pictures with animals.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund 'taking' rather than the base form 'take'. Also 'a picture with animal' should be pluralized and use an article or plural: 'pictures with animals' is natural. Suggestion: after verbs like 'love', use verb+ing; pluralize 'animals' when speaking generally.

× I really prefer urban areas because I grew up in the city and I have a memory with there and so I like the con convenience in the city, the publishers.

✓ I really prefer urban areas because I grew up in the city and I have memories there, so I like the convenience in the city.

Several preposition and word choice errors: 'have a memory with there' is ungrammatical; use 'have memories there' or 'I have memories of it'. 'con convenience' is a typo and should be 'convenience'. 'the publishers' is irrelevant and likely mistaken; remove it. Suggestion: use 'there' to refer back to 'the city', plural 'memories' for general recollections, and ensure word choice matches meaning.

× Umm, in my opinion, I prefer other view country because I really want to uh, uh, go to the other country to uh, opportunity cons, conversation with foreign people.

✓ Umm, in my opinion, I prefer other countries because I really want to go to other countries to have opportunities to converse with foreign people.

Phrase 'other view country' is incorrect: use 'other countries'. 'to uh, opportunity cons' is ungrammatical and unclear; intended meaning is 'to have opportunities' and 'conversation' should be the verb 'converse' or phrase 'to have conversations'. Also maintain plural when speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'other countries' and 'to have opportunities to converse' for clarity.