Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like “like”, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Focus on accurate grammar (e.g., plural/singular, articles) and smoother phrasing.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often take landscape photos of mountains and beaches because they preserve memories and help me relive special moments when I look at them later.

提案: Answer the question directly with one clear sentence, then give a specific reason using linking words. Avoid repeating words and fix grammar errors (e.g., "my country" not "my countries"). Use varied vocabulary rather than repeating "best."

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has dramatic mountains and beautiful coastlines. For instance, the nearby lakes and seaside cliffs offer unique colors and landscapes that I don't often see abroad.

× Yes, I do like taking picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'taking' implies making multiple photos of different views; countable nouns describing general activities use plural form. Suggestion: use 'pictures' when referring to photos in general.

× I also like taking pictures in general since it can like get me like a storage memory in my camera or my phone and I can look back at the memories and remember that cool moments.

✓ I also like taking pictures in general because they can store memories on my camera or phone, and I can look back at them and remember those cool moments.

Multiple issues: 'can like get me like a storage memory' uses filler 'like' unnecessarily and awkward wording; 'it' is singular but refers to plural 'pictures' so should be 'they'; 'a storage memory' is unidiomatic; 'that cool moments' mixes singular demonstrative 'that' with plural 'moments'—use 'those'. Suggestions: remove filler words, ensure pronoun number agreement, use 'store memories' and 'those' for plural.

× Can you repeat the question?

✓ Can you repeat the question?

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.

× I actually prefer views in my countries in my country since it has the best mountains, the best seas, the best lakes and the best overall view to be honest.

✓ I actually prefer views in my country since it has the best mountains, seas, lakes, and overall scenery, to be honest.

Errors corrected: 'my countries in my country' is redundant and incorrect—use 'my country' singular; listing items: use plural nouns without 'the' when speaking generally ('mountains, seas, lakes'); 'overall view' is better expressed as 'overall scenery'. Also improved punctuation and word order. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and keep number agreement consistent.