Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 発音と文法の誤りを直し、簡潔で自然な一文の冒頭（トピック文）を作ってから、理由や具体例を付け加えてください。例えば動詞の時制や目的語、固有名詞（富士山など）の正確な発音・表記に注意し、冗長な語を省きます。

例: Yes, I do. I often take photos of landscapes, especially Mount Fuji, because its shape and seasonal changes make beautiful pictures.

提案: 意図を明確にする語彙を選び、曖昧な表現や不適切な語（例: "suicide"）を避けてください。まず都市か田舎かを明確に答え、その後に理由や具体的な特徴（建物、自然、静けさなど）を一つか二つ述べるとよいです。

例: I prefer rural views. I enjoy the peaceful countryside and wide open spaces because they feel relaxing and offer clear, natural scenery.

提案: 文の構造を整え、比較の表現を使って明確に答えてください。まずどちらを好むかをはっきり述べ、次に理由を短く具体的に説明します。曖昧な語や意味不明な語は避けてください。

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different cultures and landscapes that I can't find at home.

× Yes I do I taking the picture Fuji song on the Tamakula and.

✓ Yes, I do. I took a picture of Mount Fuji from the Tamagawa River.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: missing punctuation, incorrect verb form 'taking' instead of past tense 'took', wrong word order and incorrect place names ('Fuji song on the Tamakula' unclear). Use clear clause boundaries and correct past tense for a completed action. Suggestion: separate into two sentences or use a conjunction, use 'took a picture of' + object, and correct place name to 'Mount Fuji' and 'Tamagawa River' if that is intended.

× I like the company's side, uh, company side. Beautiful, uh, suicide.

✓ I like the countryside. It is beautiful and peaceful.

The student likely intended to say 'countryside' but used 'company's side' which is incorrect word choice (adjective/noun misuse). 'Suicide' is a wrong word and likely a mispronunciation of 'scenery' or 'quiet'. Correct by using appropriate nouns and adjectives: 'countryside' (noun) and adjectives 'beautiful' and 'peaceful'. Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× I like abroad other company. As this is because, uh. Isaac.

✓ I like other countries. This is because I can experience different cultures.

The original sentence uses incorrect word order and wrong lexical choices: 'abroad other company' is ungrammatical. 'As this is because' is redundant and awkward. Provide a clear subject and verb: 'I like other countries.' Then explain reason using 'This is because...' followed by a complete clause. Use 'experience different cultures' to give a natural reason.