Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on producing a clear topic sentence, reduce repetition, fix grammar (use tense and pronouns correctly), and add one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Keep the answer natural and within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views, especially while travelling, because they help me remember places I have visited. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets and busy city streets, and then share the best shots with my friends online. This way I can look back on special memories.

提案: Start with a direct answer (urban or rural), avoid unrelated words, and give clear reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (use 'prefer', 'I like', 'at night') and provide one or two concrete examples about what you like in urban scenes.

例: I prefer urban views because I love the vibrant atmosphere and city lights at night. For instance, I enjoy photographing neon signs and busy streets, which create dynamic compositions and show how lively a city can be.

提案: Answer directly and clearly, use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'prefer', 'farmland', 'countryside'), avoid repetition, and link contrasting ideas with words like 'however' or 'but'. Give specific examples of landscapes at home and features abroad.

例: I prefer the views in my own country because I love its farmland, rolling hills, and peaceful rivers, which feel familiar and comforting. However, I also appreciate views in other countries, especially their distinctive architecture and different landscapes, which offer new visual inspiration.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views especially when I travel.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different scenes, especially when I travel.

The original sentence is mostly correct but 'views' is awkward here; 'scenes' is more natural. Also add a comma before 'especially' for clarity.

× It's help me remember the place and I I traveled and I share and I shared the I and I shared my friends and online it's remember in my lifetime in different views.

✓ It helps me remember the places I have traveled to, and I share the photos with my friends online so they will be remembered throughout my life.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement (use 'helps' not 'help'), awkward tense and word order. Use present perfect 'have traveled' to link past experience to present, and clarify sharing 'with my friends online'. Remove repetitions and restructure for clarity.

× Yes, I perform news in urban areas because I love the urban areas in roads and conditions in the urban areas I I in in night time in night time I travel in urban areas I love the lights and the roadside of you in outside outside of building views the.

✓ Yes, I prefer urban areas because I love the roads and atmosphere there. At night I travel in urban areas because I love the lights and the views outside buildings and along the roadside.

Many errors: wrong word choice ('perform news' -> 'prefer'), repetition, incorrect word order and missing prepositions. Rephrase sentences, use 'prefer' for preference, and correct preposition use ('along the roadside', 'outside buildings'). Remove duplicated words and improve flow.

× I prepare the car the scene in my own country because I love the farmers land land crops.

✓ I prefer the countryside scenes in my own country because I love the farmers' fields and crops.

Wrong verb ('prepare' -> 'prefer'), repetition and incorrect noun phrases. Use 'farmers' fields' (possessive) or 'farmland' and correct plurality. 'Countryside scenes' is more natural than 'car the scene'.

× The hills, rivers and roadside villages feel England and comforting to me.

✓ The hills, rivers, and roadside villages feel familiar and comforting to me.

Incorrect word 'England' likely intended 'familiar'. Also add commas in a list and use 'familiar and comforting' to express the sentiment clearly.

× However, I I also enjoy the views in other countries when I travel because different architecture and continental scenes.

✓ However, I also enjoy views in other countries when I travel because they have different architecture and landscapes.

Remove duplicate 'I'. The clause was incomplete; add subject 'they' to refer to other countries and use 'landscapes' instead of 'continental scenes' for natural phrasing.